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This was made in the lifespan of a single pop-tart as more of an experiment than a potential remix. I was playing around with the timing of echoes and reverb and this song was my lab rat. If you pick up the lufia 1 spc archive from zophar.net, you won't have a difficult time picking out the source song (I'm unsure as to the specific name but there aren't that many songs in there). I don't do slow songs. I just don't. But I tried. I can't critique myself objectively, however, so input would be much appreciated. http://files.ww.com/files/29086.html Version 2: http://files.ww.com/files/29136.html. It's basically the old version with more added on after the end of V1. Feedback would be much appreciated.

I second that. And fake guitar makes me want to cry. I don't hear a kick drum. The kick is the snare's wingman...or the other way around. Whatever the case, it needs that kick. Also, It sounds like the snare goes up and down in pitch; changing the pitch on the snare can be a good technique to break up midi-sequenced choppiness, but it has to be a subtle thing (and used on several notes next to each other, rather than switching the pitch every measure). I can kind of see what you were trying to do with the snare, but it's such a bad sample...it doesn't stand a chance. If you can't find any better samples, then screw with the EQ and try to get a more natural sound. It may just be these speakers, but I listened to the new version with the reverb and it seemed muddier than the version before it... I'd say bringing in a kick drum and sequencing the snare to work around the kick would drastically improve the song and break up (if only a little) that one-two-threefourfivesix one-two-threefourfivesix thing you've got going.

First off, the crowd effect is your enemy. I'd drop it completely, at least for now. Second, the synth you're using for a bass doesn't change. At 2:01 when some variation comes in, the bass just goes up an octave. Switch it up a bit, you know? Also, the bass synth needs more bass and less treble (at least on these speakers). The buzzing took away from the rest of the song. Third, I like the way it drops out at 1:18 (except for the crowd sound), but when it resumes it's the same basic thing as when it left. It'd be awesome if it drops out and then some crazy new section kicks in where the bass is dynamic with the drums working around it. When I listened to the midi file, I was surprised that you only utilized part of the source tune. You could work in a lot more of the source's chord progressions and it'd be better for it. Don't get so caught up in the theme or the genre that you abandon creativity; take some liberties and this thing could shine. ...And don't take shots at your own stuff. It's irritating and has "defense mechanism" written all over it.

This is reminiscent of Romantic-era music performed on an acoustic guitar. I'm not sure if anyone else has heard it before (as it's becoming increasingly rare), but they record the guitar to sound just like it is in this song. The light high notes and more dominant bass notes are a stylistic choice on their part, and one that -in my opinion- is best able to capture the genre. I'd have trouble believing that you've never heard an example of that before, listening to this. It's perfect. Make more songs like this.

Granted, but keep in mind that it was all literally thrown together over the course of two days, most of which was spent untangling wires and experimenting with different mic angles. I didn't even bother to touch the EQ. The production in the final version will be much improved, promise. It's mostly concept at the moment. It's nice to see positive feedback. I had actually put this thing on hold so I could work on another remix, but now that I've gotten some additional feedback to work off of, I'll be sure to see this one through.

I agree. As for the vocals having no dynamic range and pitch control...well, I was just lazy and burned out at that point (kills my ability to hit higher notes). Anyways, I was worried about the whole song going nowhere, but the problem I ran into is that the song would end up sounding disjointed when I would try to take it in a different direction. Maybe I should bring in another theme? I was hoping the bridge would break it up a bit, but listening to it again with fresh ears...too little too late by that point. And that gun and child friendly line was originally going to be a quip about Carmelo Anthony and guns, but there were too many syllables to work out for such an obscure reference. I'm glad you liked it, though.

http://fileho.com/download/f5f212750390/reapwhatyousow.mp3.html This is a song I started two days ago from Ocarina of Time. It's a rock song, the general theme being a disgruntled Link's ultimatum to all the people he's been forced to save again and again (and then again). There are some things I'm already planning to fix, like the bridge's balance between right and left, the patch used for the chorus' lead and the volume of that lead. Also, I'm planning to redo the vocals, maybe add some background vocals, and redo all the guitar. I'm forgetting something else...meh, whatever. The tracks used are Kotake & Koume's theme (or whatever their names are) for the verses and the Song of Storms for the chorus. http://www.zophar.net/usf/lozusf.rar (in case you're not familiar with either theme) Critique away.

I'm Jere, but when I write I go by Altus Audacia because it's latin and has that consequent "foreboding destiny" about it. I essentially quit everything to be a musician and resolved to launch myself to fame and fortune by introducing my music through several mediums such as this (I'll garner support, then start a Jere-should-be-famous petition...), so I'm currently working on a few remixes. Been a fan of this site for many years, it'll be nice to eventually contribute.