Shame no ones replied to this, so I had to register just for it.
Personally, I like it. I only have a few qualms with it:
-intro (0:00-0:10). The drumming pleases me not
I'd also suggest linking into the 1 minute mark more smoothly. It abruptly stops, and after such an awesome rift you created, too! I love that rift, by the way (0:32-0:36). You kept it going nicely.
But yeah, the song needs to segway into the one minute mark more smoothly. It switches up too drastically, IMO. Then again, I know very little about music, so take it with a grain of salt. But I do think this has potential.