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If something happens in the, what, 13th game, I'd like to think there's no need to consider it. The "original Falchion" is still named just "Falchion", so there's no need to refer to it as anything but "Falchion". Maybe Polo had a reason for calling it "his Falchion" that I'm not aware of.

EDIT: Thanks for explaining though!

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Hmm.

"Falchion and its Marth"

Yeah, that sounds... really weird. But I think that's partly because the Falchion isn't a living thing and can't really own anything, especially not living things such as Marth.

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I agree with Dafydd that it's odd to call it "his" since there is only one

It's not really odd per se, I don't think. You could talk about King (not sure why that's capitalized. Is it because it's a title, like Dr.?) Arthur and his Excalibur, even if there's only one, to emphasize whom it belongs to - but I don't see a reason to emphasize ownership in that particular sentence in the bio. Still, I asked out of genuine curiosity, and not because I thought it looked wrong.

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Marth doesn't wear any armor in his games, so trust serves as it's equivalent. (Honestly, it could also be a million other things as well)

I get the metaphor, I'm just having issues with the, um. *looks up words* Typography? Punctuation? There's a word for this, I know it, I just don't know it. The quote marks.

Completely. There are other Falchions, just this one is his own.

In that case, why is it capitalized? We had a discussion about capitalization earlier on, and concluded that when you come up with a word or a name for something you can capitalize it, at least in English. But falchion is an old word in English and isn't normally capitalized, just like most other nouns aren't.

EDIT: Or are you saying that had Marth been wielding another Falchion, it wouldn't have made more damage with the tip than the hilt?

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Don't worry, I'm not dead.

I didn't. Not that I wouldn't miss you Thanks for the quick reply (I only fixed Crash so far, but I'll get back to the others soon) and the quick bio post.

Now then;

"Altea, and he suffers"

Any particular reason why "who" wouldn't work instead of "and he"? Either works fine. I think I would've used "who", and I'm not sure why.

He battles opponents equipped with his trusty Falchion

Pesky enemies, always getting their hands on his sword. Can't they bring their own weapons to the fight? Jokes aside though, I actually misunderstood that sentence on the first read.

a certain "armor" called trust.

It looks weird to put the thing that's being called something in quotes and the thing it's being called in not-quotes. On the other hand, it would look even worse with quotes around both. I'm not sure what to do about this one, if anything.

The tip of his Falchion deals more damage than the hilt

Just out of curiosity, would it change the meaning at all if "his Falchion" was just "Falchion"?

Other than that, high-quality goods as per usual.

I'd actually been poking in the Vyse bio for the last two weeks but have been unable to do more than change a single word here and there and don't feel my efforts are leading towards any good. So Dafydd, if you want to finish it off for me as it looks like you are, I'd greatly appreciate your help, and I apologize to both of you that I dropped out of contact for so long.

Apology accepted - I know how it is. Thanks for the clarification, also. Keep an eye out for the final version and let us know if there's anything in it you don't like. That shouldn't be too hard.

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And finally, Amaterasu, last updated in May, here left nearly in its original state:

When the land of Nippon is once again shrouded in darkness brought upon by the fearsome demon Orochi, the tree spirit Sakuya, in desperation, summons the great Sun Goddess Ōkami Amaterasu. Appearing as a white wolf to ordinary people, her red markings appear only to those who have strong faith in the gods.

Joined by a wandering artist named Issun, Amaterasu carries the Celestial Brush, which she uses to manipulate the world around her to revitalize the land and ward off evil. She also carries on her back the Divine Instrument, which is her primary mode of attack.

Throughout her adventures, she uses the powers granted to her by the Celestial Brush Gods to defeat the evil that resides throughout the land. As the land learns of her benevolent deeds [or, as word of her benevolent deeds spreads], more people offer praise to her, which enhances her divine powers. With the powers granted to her, Amaterasu sets out to save Nippon from evil.

Notes not fixed:

- This very first sentence is a little long. It's not really a problem though, and I can't think of a way to break it up without breaking the flow, but you're welcome to try.

- Try to find a way to avoid this repetition of "the land".

- "once again shrouded in darkness" --> To add to Dafydd's words, if the story of Nippon and god/demon intervention is cyclical, you'll have to establish that more clearly (otherwise having "once again" in the first sentence feels out of place without backup).

I'd still prefer to give Nonamer a chance to work some more on this, but it's been over a month since he last logged in, and 4 months since he last updated this. It needs more meat on the bones though. Nothing wrong with a short bio, but take away the reiterations and there's hardly anything left.

We're also awaiting Polo's Marth bio, which today marks as 1 month in the making. 3 of the above bios are very near completion though.

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Nice catches, much appreciated, and fixed.

Here's Vyse, with a few changes of my own (feel free to crit) based on my comment earlier (original version here)

In the world of Arcadia, all of the continents are floating islands. Six colored moons orbit the planet, and lunar asteroids fall from them regularly. These "Moon Stones" power nearly everything people use on a daily basis, from machinery to magic. Using Moon Stone-powered ships, people sail through the skies to trade, fish, and make a living.

In this world lives Vyse, a teenager with a heart full of curiosity. His family and closest friends are all members of the Blue Rogues, a faction of air pirates who steal from the rich and then use what they've stolen to protect the innocent and help the needy. Vyse, serving alongside his father in his band of pirates, is formidable in combat thanks to his skills with twin cutlasses. Equally skilled at fighting is Aika, a feisty redhead and his best friend from childhood, with whom he often teams up to take down large groups of opponents without fear.

The primary targets of Vyse and his fellow Blue Rogues are the forces of the Valuan Empire, who come from the more advanced civilization under the Yellow Moon, and whose empress is obsessed with controlling all that she sees. The Blue Rogues also battle with the Black Pirates, a rival marauder faction that doesn't hesitate to kill and steal from everyone they come across. But Vyse has always desired to explore more than just the area near his home, to fly "beyond the sunset" and encounter things people have only imagined. He and Aika thus find their worldview thrown for a loop when they meet Fina, a mysterious girl from an unknown land. Fina has a secret mission that puts her in direct conflict with the Valuan Empire and their ambition. In their attempts to keep their new friend safe from harm, Vyse and Aika realize this mission will take them on a trip around Arcadia, to lands no one has seen in millennia. Unable to resist the call of heroism and discovery, the three set sail for the adventure of a lifetime.

Now then, I have one gripe left with this, and it's the "thus find their worldview thrown for a loop". To throw for a loop has a negative sound to it, in all the definitions I've found, and it should be something positive. "are thus very excited" gets the message across, but sounds stupid. Also, "in their attempts to keep their new friend safe from harm, Vyse and Aika realize this mission will take them" places as if they had already joined the mission. So maybe "this mission would take them" rather than "will". Furthermore, in the last sentence it sounds as if Fina is as excited and motivated by the same feelings as the other two, which I don't know to be true.

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I was wrong about September. Very, very wrong. Here's Crash Bandicoot with all the suggestions since the last version included:

A breakthrough in platform video game design, Crash Bandicoot started life on the Sony PlayStation, going as far as being an unofficial mascot for the system throughout the 1990s.

A reject from Dr. Neo Cortex's globe-dominating mutant army, Crash typically sets out to stop whatever diabolical scheme Cortex has to take over the world, usually involving the power of tall purple 'power crystals.' In spite of being enemies, there have been instances of Crash and Cortex working together throughout the series' progression, usually against a common foe.

Crash is often joined by the guardian mask Aku Aku, who acts as a mentor and shield; his sister Coco, a much smarter bandicoot capable of hacking into Cortex's data systems and building many gadgets, including the virtual 'warp rooms' early on in the series' run; Crunch, a bandicoot obsessed with his own fitness and strength; and many small animals that guide them from place to place, including a polar bear cub, a tiger cub, and a T. rex hatchling.

Crash himself is highly expressive in spite of his limited verbal skills, mostly through exaggerated body language. He's not afraid of getting hurt even with Aku Aku getting in the way, and he would easily throw himself in the line of danger just to do what's right. His range of attacks originally started with a jump and a spin attack — which solidified his namesake due to his 'crashing' into boxes this way — but he eventually learnt new tricks over time, including the belly flop, a slide attack, and even wielding a fruit bazooka! Outside of his adventuring time, he can be seen relaxing at the beach, whether it be sunbathing, wakeboarding, feasting on wumpa fruit, or spending time with Coco and Crunch.

The original Crash title was critically acclaimed for its 3D-on-rails game design and cartoony visuals, and has sold over 6 million units worldwide. Additionally, Crash is one of very few Western-created game franchises to receive a huge following in Japan. This was further helped by having new cosmetic additions and bonuses exclusive to the Japanese releases, with some being brought back into future Western releases, including Crash's signature victory dance and the recurring joke character Fake Crash.

[Ripple Dot Zero]

Check out the unused music

Whoa, where'd you find this?

Works well with an ordinary USB controller without analog stick + joy2key software.

Arrow said it didn't in the first post, so I never bothered to check. Regardless, I don't have one without analog sticks, and had this been non-flash, again, I'm sure that wouldn't have been a problem.

you sure you just don't have a slow internet?

it's running at what looks like at least 30 fps on my computer.

I really don't think this is an issue with connection speed. Try pulling the cable while playing and you'll see what I mean.

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I actually ended up buying the soundtrack, heh.

Haven't seen the glitch you're getting. Only thing I don't like about the game is that it's flash. The frame rate feels like less than 20 or so and there's no gamepad support, which I'm sure there would have been otherwise..

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The three first levels weren't that exciting, I don't think, but the music makes it worth it. Graphics and music are amazing on the fourth level.

By the way, the same guy made the music and the graphics. His artwork is really worth checking out, I think: http://www.simonstalenhag.se/index.html

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This isn't getting the attention it deserves. I found out about this just now, and the music is the best I've heard in forever. Really cool artwork, too.

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Agreed. Fixed.

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You wrote:

Pikachu is a small yellow rodent-like animal from the series Pokémon. Since its introduction in 1996, it has gone on to become the mascot character of the entire franchise. Appearing on Pokémon-related merchandise from books to stickers to clothing, Pikachu is synonymous with the series, and is one of the most well-known video game characters of all time.

Pikachu, referring to both individuals and groups, are quick and agile, overcoming their low physical strength and endurance. They concentrate on outmaneuvering their opponents, and then hitting them with powerful Electric attacks. They can use the paralyzing Thunder Wave to stun an opponent, or dash at them with a powerful Volt Tackle. Rarely, a Pikachu may know the powerful Surf attack, a tidal wave that crashes down upon an enemy and sweeps them away. Their electrical powers are so strong that when several of them gather, they can inadvertently cause thunderstorms.

Though typically found in lush woodlands like the Viridian Forest, they have been known to appear in cities or power-generating plants. They are attracted to the electricity in the wiring, and are sometimes spotted suckling the wiring like a straw, sipping voltage. Whether they increase their power this way or are simply replenishing their energy is unknown.

Pikachu prefer berries and fruits, but will eat man-made foods from time to time. Wild Pikachu are known to use their Electric attacks on hard berries, attempting to cook them until they soften. Sometimes, they underestimate their power, and accidentally incinerate the food they were trying to prepare.

Trainers (people that capture and raise Pokémon for battling) who wish to use a Pikachu are advised to watch out for the red spots on Pikachu's cheeks. They are actually pouches which store vast amounts of electrical energy. Careless contact can result in a powerful shock. Lastly, Pikachu are known to quickly turn around and bite whoever tries to grab their tail. With enough love and attention, Pikachu will not only follow a Trainer around, but may even sit upon their shoulders or head. Loyal and steadfast, Pikachu will defend fellow Pokémon and humans against enemies and natural disasters. They are deeply affectionate and make lifelong friends with those they trust.

Sources:

1.) http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Pikachu#Pok.C3.A9dex_entries_3

2.) http://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Pok%C3%A9mon_Yellow_Version

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The only part I don't really like is where I put in the bit in the second paragraph explaining how the name refers to both singular and plural. I know it explains it, but it also feels kind of forced in.

I then wrote that I don't think it sounds forced in, but what I meant by what I said earlier wasn't that you should explain that Pikachu refers to both singular and plural (which is self-evident, really, reading the bio), but that it refers to both one specific, individual Pikachu, named Pikachu (which I believe to be the one used as a mascot for the series) and the species as a whole.

Also,

Lastly, one should never grab a Pikachu by its tail. They will quickly turn around and bite you.

As Polo mentioned earlier, don't address the reader as if you're writing a manual. This is the only place you do this in the bio, so it's an easy fix.

Overall, the bio is a little on the long side. Things like how they overcook berries are fun little facts that add personality, but remember who you're writing for. On the other hand, maybe reducing the number of paragraphs would make this feel more succinct.

Then Polo wrote this (I fixed all of these for you already, but for reference):

- "books to sticker to clothing" --> stickers

- "crashed down upon an enemy" --> crashes

- "so strong, that" --> You can cut the comma here (it won't sound weird without it)

- "they may inadvertently cause thunderstorms" --> Saying "they can" helps show that Pikachu-made thunderstorms are a possibility rather than speculation.

- "power generating" --> "power-generating" (hyphen)

Looks like you missed these notes. Or do you disagree with them for some reason?

- Since Pikachu's attack types are Electric (capitalized), it looks like you can also capitalize "electric" in the 2nd paragraph.

- "live-long" --> lifelong

- The last two paragraphs look like they can act as one, since both talk about Trainers taming Pikachu.

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Alright. Nice work

We're now down to 5 in-progress bios and none unclaimed. Still no word from Rexy or Nonamer.

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Very cool, Polo.

Only a few gripes:

Bayonetta is an Umbra Witch, a commander of dark powers thanks to the pact she and her kind have made with demons from Inferno (hell).

I'm a commander of dark grammar thanks to the many hours I spent editing mascot bios... well, that actually doesn't sound so bad. Nevermind I said anything.

Bayonetta can activate Witch Time, a brief period that slows everything around her to a near halt and gives her a chance to deliver swift counterattacks.

I'm not sure whether I should call "ambiguous" on this one, but from now on, whenever the lady of the house has a period (briefs or no briefs), I'm going to call it "Witch Time". How about "Witch Time, slowing everything around her to a near halt for a brief period of time, giving her a chance to deliver swift counterattacks"? Or replacing "period" with "moment", if you don't feel like repeating the word "time".

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Yeah Mirby, thanks for hanging in there. And to Larry for swinging by.

Imma go PM the others.

EDIT: Done. Arrow replied saying it might be a while, but we have 4 other bios to finish in the meantime (plus Marth).

EDIT 2: The Damned might be around soonish. Still awaiting replies from Rexy and Nonamer.

EDIT 3: It's been nearly a week, and no replies so far. I'm going to be even more horribly busy this whole month, but if we still haven't heard anything from the writers of the bios currently in progress by the end of it, I'm going to pick them up and work out the last wrinkles myself. September should be pretty calm for me.

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I would also like to say that I think Proto Man (yes, PROTO MAN) is also completed and ready for the OCRWiki.

This subject, Proto Man, was Light's first creation, and fled the lab for personal reasons despite not being fully completed.

Why is is "and" and not "but"? This sounds like fleeing is a typical thing to do for first creations. I'm also wondering if it shouldn't be "the subject" rather than "this subject". Other than that, fine by me.

When wearing a higher class of plate, however, Arthur can sometimes withstand more hits

Now it sounds as if even if you have better armor, it only helps you take more damage some of the time. Wouldn't it be more correct to say "When wearing some higher classes of plate" or similar?

Also, I added a new rule in the guidelines about posting new versions of bios in new posts, because I prefer being able to read all the versions and compare them.

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It is indeed something Arthur says.

http://marvelvscapcom.wikia.com/wiki/Special_Conversations#Arthur_5

(Calling for help) Ho!

"Calling for help"? Is that really how you want to end the bio?

I added the parenthetical about the shield to clarify it a bit without getting too specific about the game it happens in, but if anyone thinks further clarification is needed, run some edit suggestions by me.

It's not too specific to mention the shield, but "With the aid of a shield" should be modified to say "sometimes with the aid of a shield", if it's not always the case. Also, you might not want to say "if Arthur takes a hit without first upgrading his suit of armor" if the number of hits varies depending on the game. "A beating" is unspecific enough to get the message across without giving an actual number (but it can still mean one).

I realize now that I read "absorb more enemy firepower as well as channel magic into his weaponry" as Arthur being able to use his shield to absorb magic and reroute it into his weapon, which I'm guessing is not correct. At any rate, I don't think "firepower" covers melee attacks.

I'm not bothered by it myself, but if you have a edit rec to address it and it works better, we can roll with that.

Any ideas, DarkLink42? I'm pretty happy with it as it is, but I'm open to ideas.

Oh, and, what does "rec" mean?

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Would it help to rearrange the two lists so they aren't in close proximity to one another? It doesn't read like there's too much listing to me, just that the two sentences which do it come right after one another.

I didn't even notice that, heh. Maybe it's the excellent "fiendish foes" ending of the first one that throws me off guard.

"Adventure, ho!"

Yeah, that's more like how I've heard it before, specifically "Land, ho!", which I always took as more of a "Hey guys, I can see land!" than "Hey guys, let's get ashore!", but the two may very well be equivalent in most situations.

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Ho, when used as an exclamation, is the equivalent of saying "let's go" or "off we go." I'm not 100% but I think it might just be a shortened version of "tally-ho." According to the wise sage Wik E'Pedia, that was a phrase used in fox hunting to excite the hounds into the chase. So not terribly far off from how it's being used in this context.

I had a talk with the same sage, but didn't see anything that could be interpreted as "let's go". But in that case, it makes sense.

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"Before Dr. Thomas Light built Mega Man, he was working on a prototype robot. This subject, Proto Man, fled the lab for personal reasons despite not being completed yet."

Would this also solve the issue with the word "different"?

I like "prototype robot". But why the change to "subject" and losing "over a misunderstanding"? I would prefer something closer to what we had before. Something like...

"Before Dr. Thomas Light built Mega Man, he was working on a prototype robot. This robot, Proto Man, was the first of his creations, but before he could finish his work, Proto Man fled the lab over a misunderstanding."

Buuuut then we have "Proto Man" twice in that sentence, and "robot" twice in very close proximity, so that's not quite it either.

"Stop" and "stopped" are far too close together for my liking. Perhaps change the second instance to "quit"? Also, I suggest dropping the word "out", resulting in "he quit helping Dr. Wily during the events of the fourth game".

Nice catch. I thought I had mentioned "out" earlier, but apparently not. Personally, I don't like the sound of "quit helping" other than as an imperative, but that's really just me.

During his battles, if Arthur takes a hit without first upgrading his armor, he'll lose his suit of armor and be forced to persevere in nothing but his shorts! Yet when equipped with a higher class of armor, Arthur can absorb more enemy firepower as well as channel magic into his weaponry, making his attacks even more potent.

That's a lot of "armor" in a short piece of text. Try to reduce the repetition by substituting for something else. "When equipped with a higher class of armor" might be replaced by "when clad in finer steel" or something to that effect (I'm guessing steel probably doesn't cover all the options). That last sentence could stand to be a little shorter anyway.

the Goblin King, Loki, or Sardius

I had to read the sources to figure out whether the Goblin King and Loki were the same guy or not. Changing the order so that the Goblin King comes last would resolve any ambiguity.

Ho!

What is this word even meant to mean in this context? I thought it meant something along the lines of "hello" or "halt". Did you just throw that in there?

Other than that, !

EDIT: Ain't no one banning ME from attempting a bio. Seriously though, this should be relatively minimal edit work (the game plots are all the same, i.e. barebones story, rescue the princess) and will take one off the list.

IMO, I'd also say let Polo work on Bayonetta; he's a great editor and should make it quick. Also, some of the other in-progress ones are in limbo, so I don't see the point in holding back the productive from other work.

Well then, the ban is removed. No sense in having it there if it all it does is give site staff a chance to skip in front (not that there's a line that I know of!).

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I'm not sure I understand - the next sentence specifically says "This robot, Proto Man..." and "it wasn't long after completion..."

Quoting the source again:

"Before Proto Man's completion, Dr. Light found there was a flaw in Proto Man's power generator and wanted to repair it. Proto Man seemingly misunderstood Dr. Light's intentions, fleeing the lab believing the operation would destroy his individuality."

Again: it was before completion that Proto Man fled the lab, so the second sentence needs rewriting anyway.

One of my previous notes on the (nuked) first draft:

... ok, seriously, I missed that too? Crap.

How does "different" not sound right?

I think it puts a lot of emphasis on the fact that Proto Man is unlike, dissimilar from Mega Man, rather than the fact that they are not the one and same robot. It also feels as if we're saying that Proto Man is different from Mega Man when it's really the other way around - Mega Man is the different, new design (I think this is what you were also getting at when you criticized "another"). Maybe it's only to my ears that this word has this sense of novelty, in which case, forget I said anything. Either way, "an other" is apparently something you can't even say in English, and "another" does sound wrong too (as if Dr. Light was cranking them out by the dozens), so keep "different".

"The statute of limitations on spoilers has expired," as they say. We already know Samus is a girl and Aeris... yeah.

If you say so.

Also, my summer courses just finished, so if it's okay with you, I can write another bio (Bayonetta). I know you put up the ban on claims for a reason, but we haven't heard from most writers of the other in-progress articles between our edits/reviews of Skull Kid and Proto Man. I want to move things forward as much as you do.

Sure... but I'd prefer if you don't post it in the thread until we're done with the ones already in progress, unless I say otherwise. The reason why we haven't heard from the others is probably because I haven't reminded them in a while - I wanted to get Proto Man all done first. I'm having trouble keeping track of our discussions already, obviously.

EDIT: Also, Happy Birthday Mascot Bio Thread! You're already 8 years old (!) - that's insane.

Yikes. I was thinking it was more like 5. Which is still a lot.

[OCR02707 - Donkey Kong Country 3 (SNES) "Can't Boss Us Around (Robot Anarchists from Hell Mix)"]

This brings back memories of Unreal Tournament moreso than DKC3, especially around the 1-minute mark. Sweet!

Also, gratz HoboKa!

[OCR Mascot Bios - 20 more up for grabs!]

Also, how exactly would I go about replacing "saved the girl" with something else?

I don't know, I was hoping someone would suggest something that I liked better. Something about those three words together rubs me the wrong way, but I'll defer to Polo's judgement. I tried "rescued", but it didn't help. I would like to replace "which allowed" with "allowing" in the next clause, however.

really for one who wanted to do this bio originally, there seems to be a few things here tied into the franchise of origin that you seem to be missing.

Assumed expertise was not one of the reasons I wanted to write the bio. I agree I should have read your sources more carefully before commenting on your bio, though.

in fact, there's a part of me that thinks that maybe, just maybe, you're not happy with me taking this bio from you in the first place.

Honestly, I really don't mind. I am getting a little frustrated about this taking so long, however - not that this is any of your fault.

Oh, and, I'd like to ask you not to edit previous posts - when you post a new version, do it in a new post. This makes it easier for us to see what changes have been made and enables us to refer to previous wordings for comparisons and whatnot.

This puts us in the moment/time span during which Proto Man was coming to fruition, but it also suggests we left Dr. Light in the midst of this and then forgot him, or that completing Proto Man would've taken ages.

There's also this, taken from one of the sources:

"Before Proto Man's completion, Dr. Light found there was a flaw in Proto Man's power generator and wanted to repair it. Proto Man seemingly misunderstood Dr. Light's intentions, fleeing the lab believing the operation would destroy his individuality."

So, arguably, Proto Man was never completed, at least not by Dr. Light. So saying that Dr. Light "was working" on him doesn't sound wrong, at least not to my ears. But I still take issue with this first sentence - it feels so bait-and-switchy, leaving the reader hanging, but not hooked. Maybe something like "Sometime before Dr. Thomas Light created Mega Man, he was working on a different robot: Proto Man." would do the trick. "Nearing completion" instead of "working" might also work. "A different" still doesn't sound right. How do you feel about "an other"?

Well, I did suggest quotation marks only because it's not explicitly established earlier that Mega Man and Proto Man are brothers. Leaving out the quotes may even suggest a biological rather than robotic bond.

I must have missed that suggestion of yours - I apologize. I still think it's a little overkill to keep both the quotation marks and "of sorts", however. So, keep the quotation marks, but do away with "of sorts".

PRESENT TENSE:

"After that, Proto Man took a neutral approach to the conflicts [...]; currently, he only interferes when he feels it is absolutely necessary." (The semicolon keeps both tenses in their respective clauses)

"After that, Proto Man took a neutral approach to the conflicts [...], and as a result, he only interferes when he feels it is absolutely necessary." (We're given a hint that we've moved beyond the past conflicts and now focus on the new ones)

PAST TENSE:

"After that, Proto Man took a neutral approach to the conflicts [...], only interfering when he felt it was absolutely necessary." ("interfering" can stay in the present -ing tense to give us a glimpse of Proto Man's general mode of action during that time frame that we look back on)

"After that, Proto Man took a neutral approach to the conflicts [...], and he only interfered when he felt it was absolutely necessary." (Consistent tense throughout, like a historical retelling)

This is why I love having you on the team, haha. But I don't see a verdict. Which one do you prefer? I still vote on the first of the past tense ones.

Also, compare the following...

He feels conflicted in regards to the ongoing war between Dr. Light and Dr. Wily; one is to thank for giving him life and the other is responsible for saving it, yet the two are constantly at odds with each other. Proto Man enjoys his life of solitude, and consequently seldom keeps in contact with those concerned about him.

Proto Man enjoys being alone and his own individuality above everything else. As a result, though, he rarely keeps in touch with those who care about him. Proto Man's conscience causes him to be very conflicted between Dr. Light, his creator and Dr. Wily, who saved his life.

Finally, why is Break Man being Proto Man's alter ego (or the fact he was built by Dr. Light, or that Dr. Cossack was being blackmailed by Dr. Wily in Mega Man 4) not a spoiler? Are we assuming everyone already knows this?