Liontamer Posted September 19, 2010 Share Posted September 19, 2010 Contact Information * ReMixer name: HALO_ZERO * Real name: Cody Walton * Email address: walton.cody@gmail.com * Website: http://codywalton.com * OCR forum user id: 25433 Name of game(s) arranged: Yoshi's Island (SNES, 1995) Name of individual song(s) arranged: Level 1-1. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJ_hUgYKiv0 Additional information about game including composer, system, etc.: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Super_Mario_World_2:_Yoshi's_Island Composer: Kōji Kondō 1995, SNES Link to the original soundtrack: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJ_hUgYKiv0 Your own comments about the mix: This one is pretty simple in theme. "What if Yoshi hosted a dance party show on MTV in the mid-80's?" Well, #1 it would be totally rad, bitchin', and tubular. #2, it would probably sound something like this. Hope you enjoy it! Cody Walton HALO_ZERO ---------------------------------------------------------- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJ_hUgYKiv0 - "Flower Garden" Heh. Well, the melody coming in at :09 certainly made this dissonant. As a child of the 80s, I heard my fair share of new wave/80s style stuff, so I get what you're going for, but it doesn't excuse this level of dissonance or the lack of cohesive textures. The soundfield had no depth to it, i.e. the individual sounds had no richness, were generally too dry, and there's no direction or focus here because the parts aren't properly balanced and because of the dissonance. The other judges will have more concrete ideas on how to fix this up, but it looks like it would take a lot of work to salvage something from it. Not sure you have the chops to do it yet, no disrespect, but I'd like to see how much you could improve this. You've been improving though, Cody, so do keep at it, and props for branching out in a different style than your previous subs. NO (resubmit) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonAvenger Posted September 23, 2010 Share Posted September 23, 2010 Going to have to agree with Larry. Right now this is sounding pretty dissonant, and frankly not good. Right now you have what sounds like the melody playing in one key signature, and the bass/background playing in another. Lining those up is going to be the first big step in this. It's a bit hard to comment on the rest of the arrangement, but at times it feels a little empty between sections. I know you're going for the 80's groove, but the transitions feel a little weak when you are only depending on that. The sounds are not the worst, but they are generic, and could use a little more filling out. It might not hurt to have some backing pads to fill in some sections, as well. Get those keys lined up, and keep working on this! NO (resubmit) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OceansAndrew Posted September 23, 2010 Share Posted September 23, 2010 I think Larry has nailed the issues with this one down pretty well. I'm not sure if it's the samples, or what, but there is some pretty serious dissonance hitting here, and that definitely needs to be addressed. The sounds used are pretty authentic, but lack any sort of treatment. They need to sit in a soundfield, not just be pasted on top. The drums also sounded very authentic, but got really repetitive, you need to mix it up a little more. The guitar solo was radical though, straight up. I loved that part. It was like Eddie Van Halen showed up for a little while. I think this could be patched up, but it would be a decent amount of work. The source track is great though, and the concept is fun, it just needs to be more cohesive, and that dissonance needs to go. Good luck! No, please resubmit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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