colshnitzel Posted June 6, 2016 Share Posted June 6, 2016 Hope you all enjoy it. I started it so long ago and never got back around to refinishing it. I finally gave in an posted it or everyone to criticize. GO! TheChargingRhino 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slimy Posted June 8, 2016 Share Posted June 8, 2016 The orchestral stuff at the beginning doesn't sound particularly real, although I do like the arrangement, and I like your decision to use an actual orchestra sound for the "stabs." But I think more realistic orchestra and guitar sounds would improve the song overall. The silence at 1:37 feels very awkward... whatever you were trying to do, I don't think it's working. I also think the percussion could be more interesting - it would be much more more exciting if there was more than just a bass-snare-bass pattern right on the beat for most of the song. And the samples you used for the drums sound rather weak - I'm sure you could find some better electric drum sounds for free just by searching. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nikanoru Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 I love a good rhythm guitar riff with drive and a fast beat. Helps get you out of bed in the mornings. Like Slimy, I'm not sure of the orchestral parts of this song even though I like the arrangement. For me, it seems incongruent with the rest of the song; too many ups and downs with the speed and force, This is a powerful track with the fast pace and the driving metal sound with lots of electronic harmonies and effects; I truly think the orchestral side disrupts the pace too much. I think the drums are a little basic, but create the right sound for the track. I do love the downbeat at 0:51; gets me right into it! If you're going to keep the silence at 1:37, you need another fill right after that. The reintroduction of the rhythm guitar is good, but I feel like the main melody progression feels too repetitive here. The key change at 2:32 and 2:54 is well-timed, but I'm not sure you have the right key... Good track, lots of potential to be awesome! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slimy Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 40 minutes ago, The Nikanoru said: Like Slimy, I'm not sure of the orchestral parts of this song even though I like the arrangement. For me, it seems incongruent with the rest of the song; too many ups and downs with the speed and force, This is a powerful track with the fast pace and the driving metal sound with lots of electronic harmonies and effects; I truly think the orchestral side disrupts the pace too much. I do like the orchestral intro that leads into the fast electronic stuff, though I understand if you don't like the orchestral stuff later on because it kills the pace. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nikanoru Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 17 minutes ago, Slimy said: I do like the orchestral intro that leads into the fast electronic stuff, though I understand if you don't like the orchestral stuff later on because it kills the pace. I do have more of an issue with the second orchestral part than the first, but I'm still not sure orchestral goes with this one. I think it's the percussion. Maybe it's the tempo, maybe the drum transition - the snare is quite sharp compared to the warmer electronic beats - but it doesn't feel right. But, hey, just my opinion. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 (edited) ...Not trying to criticize? but this needs some work. Change the beat around a bit, maybe get a different snare? (first review don't yell at me-thanks.) Other than that, it's good. I'd rate it 7/10. Edited June 10, 2016 by TheChargingRhino Otherthan- other than Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 ....That pitch bend, though...you could go somewhere with that... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 Also- A Fox in Space is awesome. Can't wait for Episode 2. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nikanoru Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 2 minutes ago, TheChargingRhino said: ....That pitch bend, though...you could go somewhere with that... What do you mean? What would you do here? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 the pitch bend might turn some people away from this piece, it seems to end too quickly. But that's my look at it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 If this is his/her first attempt at remixing/remaking something, this is very good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slimy Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 1 hour ago, The Nikanoru said: I do have more of an issue with the second orchestral part than the first, but I'm still not sure orchestral goes with this one. I think it's the percussion. Maybe it's the tempo, maybe the drum transition - the snare is quite sharp compared to the warmer electronic beats - but it doesn't feel right. But, hey, just my opinion. Well, the orchestra bits overall could sound and match the rest of the song in tone better. I'm not arguing that it's perfect as it is. Ignoring that I think I really like the transition from the serious intro to "hotshot flyboy" mode. 59 minutes ago, TheChargingRhino said: Also- A Fox in Space is awesome. Can't wait for Episode 2. This is off topic, but I just realized that there's no thread for this and there probably should be. Also - it's generally good forum etiquette to edit your last post if you decide you have something more to say, (unless you're trying to bump a topic.) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted June 10, 2016 Share Posted June 10, 2016 22 minutes ago, Slimy said: Well, the orchestra bits overall could sound and match the rest of the song in tone better. I'm not arguing that it's perfect as it is. Ignoring that I think I really like the transition from the serious intro to "hotshot flyboy" mode. This is off topic, but I just realized that there's no thread for this and there probably should be. Also - it's generally good forum etiquette to edit your last post if you decide you have something more to say, (unless you're trying to bump a topic.) Yeah, I'm new. Thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nikanoru Posted June 13, 2016 Share Posted June 13, 2016 On 6/10/2016 at 4:27 PM, Slimy said: I'm not arguing that it's perfect as it is. Ignoring that I think I really like the transition from the serious intro to "hotshot flyboy" mode. Love the way you put that - 'serious intro to "hotshot flyboy" mode.' Alright, I'll listen to it a few more times this week with that view in mind. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
colshnitzel Posted June 13, 2016 Author Share Posted June 13, 2016 Thanks everyone! I agree with you. I wish I could still edit this track, but unfortunately, I no longer have the files. Perhaps I will make another one in the future. Keep the honest opinions going. It can only make my compositions stronger. TheChargingRhino 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Nikanoru Posted June 13, 2016 Share Posted June 13, 2016 1 hour ago, colshnitzel said: I wish I could still edit this track, but unfortunately, I no longer have the files. Perhaps I will make another one in the future. You really should reconstruct this if you can - it has a ton of potential. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
colshnitzel Posted June 16, 2016 Author Share Posted June 16, 2016 I have been considering it. Keep a lookout lol. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheChargingRhino Posted November 13, 2016 Share Posted November 13, 2016 ....This seems like forever ago. You told me to listen to this, Nika, I did, obviously, but I forgot what it sounded like, so I'm re-listening. =). I actually really like this A LOT. The Nikanoru 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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