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I think you might be better off just going with the hip-hop version rather than mixing it was that jazzy beginning you were talking about. Also, re-examine your sequencing, because for some reason, the notes sound somewhat like they're a bit off key. It happens, we're all human, could've just been a slip of the mouse or something.

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Could u say why it was boring and how that could be solved. I already have ideas but I'd like constructive critcism. I'll sort out off-keys if I can find them, but I kinda like the jazzy beginning.

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You may like it... but right from the beginning at :03, the piano sounded late and out of the key... :/

I have to tell the truth, I'm finding this boring, myself. Nothing in it really sticks out, you know. It's like humming the same tone for 3 minutes. Maybe a slick piano solo could do the trick.

Also, the percussion for the track sounds out of place. Maybe try using a techno or dance set (correct me if I'm wrong, but it sounded like a regular kit).

Also, in some other spots, the notes were late. I'm not sure if it was done on purpose, or what, but it sounds bad. Keep working with it, spice it up with some ideas of your own.

|GX

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Yeah ok, I haven't sorted out the off-keys yet, but I tried to spice it up a bit. Now theres hopefully less boring...ness, and more variety. The late notes were kinda done on purpose to give a jazzy feel but I'll also fix that later aswell. This song may take a while may take a while to get decent since I'm just a beginner but I'm sure it'll get somewhere. My other mix started out crap but got alot better.

Click here to listen!

Posted

I've re-played the piano parts with better timing, pumped up the tempo, changed drums to more hip hop sunding ones, changed the ending, among other things, to make it better. Could someone be kind enough to point the off-keys. I must be tone-deaf or something.

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