hallfprice Posted April 14, 2009 Share Posted April 14, 2009 Hi This is my first post here. I am looking for some feedback. This was composed with FL Studio 7 and my Yamaha keyboard. This is my first attempt at remixing anything. Also, I would consider it my first complete song. I spent a lot of time learning to use the program before I tried any VGM. I picked this song simply because a request from a friend. There are a few parts in the song that I know are not right, but that's where you guys come in! Thanks Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sockpuppet Posted April 14, 2009 Share Posted April 14, 2009 What you've got sounds pretty good, but not a lot happens. There's no melody until about 1 1/2 minutes in, and when it does come in it's a little bit hard to hear what it's doing. And it sounds as though it's been simplified a lot. But it's good that you've also added to it. After that it kinda goes back to not doing much. HOWEVER that might just be me, as I like songs with a lot of melody. Best get some more opinions before you go changing it. =) I also think you need to find some better samples. These ones sound a little low quality. A little short, but I'm assuming there's going to be more later. Anyway, keep going with it, it's sounding good! (This is a ReMix of the Brawl version right?) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hallfprice Posted April 14, 2009 Author Share Posted April 14, 2009 thanks for the feedback yeah, definitely i planned on making it longer. yeah i just used stock samples, because that's all i really knew how lol so yeah, definitely still learning im not sure how i like fl studio overall... however i know there's a whole section on the forum about software and equipment what's the most popular program used for the average ocremix? my friend is going to be buying a yamaha motif xs8 pretty soon (we get a sick discount where i work...from 3799 to like 1850 plus tax), and I'm sure i'll be able to share a lil...lol thanks again Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aninymouse Posted April 14, 2009 Share Posted April 14, 2009 I'm liking this, man. And I mean a lot. The ending is a smidge too abrupt, though. At 1:29, when the Aphex Twin bouncing ball thing comes back, it's kind of anti-climactic, since you have this beautiful, epic buildup and then it kind of stops for that sample, at which point the song picks up again. If you wanna incorperate the bouncing ball effect somewhere else in the mix (I like it, it just feels out of place), then I'd recommend having it in places that aren't otherwise "empty." Drop it from the first few seconds and bring it in at about 0'7" or so, or something. When it shows up later, have it kind of duel with that nice "airship" synth you got going. You know, pop in once or twice, but don't draw too much attention to it. I think the piano just gets overpowered by it, though. Maybe instead of having it play all the way through, just have 2 bounces. Play with it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hallfprice Posted April 14, 2009 Author Share Posted April 14, 2009 took out bouncing ball, i know what you mean... *tiny update* swapped guitar for different synth, lowered volume on backround synths, made piano a lil louder Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NDN_Shadow Posted April 14, 2009 Share Posted April 14, 2009 The noise at :12-:14 sounds really awkward, because it feels as if it's supposed to build something larger. Bring the melody in the beginning parts out a little more, it's still being overshadowed by the electronics. I like the piano alot, the "guitar" sounds a little wierd, might want to work on that. Ending feels too abrupt. Overall, it still feels unfinished, especially the synth parts, but it has alot of potential to be great. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hallfprice Posted April 15, 2009 Author Share Posted April 15, 2009 i know the ending is abrupt, i'm gonna be adding more.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tuned Logic Posted April 15, 2009 Share Posted April 15, 2009 I started off with FL Studio 7 and a Yamaha also! This is much better than my first mix was though, kudos! Maybe add a rythmic/arpeggiated pad in the background to round out the rhythm, but this is a great start. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HoboKa Posted May 1, 2009 Share Posted May 1, 2009 Man, remixing David Wise stuff isn't easy to do =p So grats for having the nerve for trying hehe. Anyhoo, this track feels a bit mild for me, I think it suffers from a lack of energy; like varying up the dynamics could help there, as well as boosting the over-all volume a bit. Oh and compressing/distorting helps a lot. On the composition side, it seems pretty dang solid, nothing really stuck out as awkward or random to me. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WillRock Posted May 1, 2009 Share Posted May 1, 2009 Hey i'm liking this, sounds cool. Ending is abrupt like people have said. You have some nice, yet simple sounding synths, i'm loving those background appeggios, altho I think the 8-bit square synth sounds a little dry, it sticks out a little in the soundscape. I also think that some of the samples aren't great, like the piano and that lead synth that plays later in the mix, and the drums sound incredibly thin, in my opinion the worst aspect. I can't say much about the arrangement, as there isn't a link to the source (hint hint) but the structure is good, it doesn't get boring after repeat listens for me. Your showing a lot of potential, considering this is your first near-complete work, great stuff. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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