OceansAndrew Posted July 9, 2016 Share Posted July 9, 2016 Original Decision I took out the drums edit: no crits please, just a yes or no Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chimpazilla Posted July 10, 2016 Share Posted July 10, 2016 It's most definitely better like this, without the drums, although the other issues are still there (occasional sour notes, somewhat rigid sequencing, odd lead volume envelopes). Are you sure you don't want to put in some subtle drums (subtle/soft and half-time from the first version), at the very least during the reprise at 2:34? Even just a shaker or toploop? If this is the final version, you get my YES but it won't be the strongest YES ever. Switching to NO in the interest of moving things along. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gario Posted July 11, 2016 Share Posted July 11, 2016 No crits? Aw, you're no fun. The drums being removed helps, but I'm still feeling the other issues that were present still tilts this below the bar. The missed notes were a really easy fix - I'm particularly surprised nothing was done there. I think my prior vote still stands - details on other judgment, minus the drum issue. NO Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Liontamer Posted July 21, 2016 Share Posted July 21, 2016 This is too quick and impulsive of a RESUB, because IMO just taking out the drums makes the song feel too empty and didn't feel like a substantive way to address the criticisms on dynamics. That said, I'm considering this like more of an in-game piece where it's very possible that you wouldn't need/want drums in the picture, in order to give this the benefit of the doubt, but I still don't think it feels quite full enough. But it certainly could work with that approach. I think with one or two more elements in here, e.g. some sort of further padding/airyness, more transitions similar to :49's sweep, and/or more variation in the instrumentation, the piece would sound more complete. In any case, the arrangement's still good, but there's still something missing here dynamically. Still hoping this can fully click so we can post it in some form; it's not as if it's far from the mark.NO (resubmit) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OceansAndrew Posted November 2, 2016 Author Share Posted November 2, 2016 you can close this one out and let go, no worries Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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