Liontamer ⚖️ Posted December 3, 2024 Posted December 3, 2024 Resub 8 (previous decision) Resub 7 Resub 6 Resub 5 Resub 4 Resub 3 Resub 2 Resub 1 (after Direct Rejection of original 2012 submission) Artist Name: Audiomancer, Aka Eric I added some drum fills, and brought out the highs some, I think I fixed the "behind a pillow" problem mentioned by judges the last time around:) I also added a slight boost to the 200 to 300 hz range, as suggested. Games & Sources Dragon Warrior 4, Chapter 4, Mara and Nara's walkabout theme, with a little bit of the battle theme.
prophetik music ⚖️ Posted December 5, 2024 Posted December 5, 2024 my last vote complained about a hole in the freq range, suggested expanding some higher-end EQs, and fixing some plodding sections in the middle. opening has a lot more body to the beat now, good punch in the kick. transition at 0:41 is a bit busy but works. 0:58's a big break - good choice to keep the lfo movement on the pads active, so that it kept moving forward. 1:30's a real vibe change, and i continue to like all the extra transitional elements and interesting audio bits here and there. lead at 2:00 gets buried a bit. there's a dropoff and some outro at 2:49, and that's it. i think i'm to a point where i can say this is a pass now! there's a few parts i wouldn't mind hearing cleaned up, but what's here is imo over the bar. if it goes back for another bake, i'd suggest keeping the section between 1:50 and 2:00 moving better, have the transition at 2:00 be less abrupt, and increasing the lead's volume at 2:00 so it's clearer (might require something else to reinforce it). what a ride though! thanks for sticking with it. YES
Hemophiliac ⚖️ Posted December 7, 2024 Posted December 7, 2024 I remember this one from way back in the workshop before I was a judge. It's incredible to hear how far this has come, you've really crafted this into something very nice. It's a testament to your persistence and not giving up. There's a couple tiny moments that could be better (read: cleaner) but those would be nitpicks and not pulling teeth over. Clearly I can see that you've learned a lot from this and have improved greatly in the journey. The percussion and bass sit together very nicely and don't step on each others toes. I love how much personalization this has and how it's still the original but with so much embellishment and new character. YES
Gario ⚖️ Posted December 13, 2024 Posted December 13, 2024 Well, this one's definitely done a circuit around here. It's one I usually catch on it's way out and it gets it's last vote before I can get my thoughts out. No more - time to give my two cents. The arrangement has an interesting vibe going for it - heavily electronic, yet leans into a more middle eastern vibe. It's short and sweet so it doesn't outlast the audience's interest, and has plenty of variety in it's textures to keep the listener from experiencing too much fatigue. The production values are plenty good enough for OCR, as well, though that's to be expected with how much refinement this one's experienced. The kick isn't bad, but it could've used more... well, kick to it. That is to say, the attack on the kick would've benefitted from being sharper and more pronounced, because as it stands it both takes a little too much space on the bottom while being a little hard to hear. It's not nearly enough of an issue to sink the arrangement, but with everything else being cleaned up over the iterations it's the only thing that sticks out. Yeah, can't say the persistence didn't pay off, because this is one polished little arrangement you got here. I like it, and I hope others will too when it's on the front page. YES
Liontamer ⚖️ Posted December 14, 2024 Author Posted December 14, 2024 The mixdown still isn't ideal in that some of the backing bass elements are quietly mixed, but the overall presentation's stronger. Lead at :17 is better, and the dropoff at :33 was nice contrast, where the texture became clear and you also threw in some accenting SFX. Nice transition sound at :57 as well. The dynamics and sound design are feeling a lot more cohesive this time around. Good pulsating/warbling sounds at 1:22 that were changing volume and moving around the stereo field to add flavor to the presentation during the break section until 2:01. The lil' SFX at 2:03 was too loud as well as the glassier sounds starting at 2:04, which were shrill; nothing dealbreaking, but should be adjusted. Lead at 2:35 was a little bland, but had some modulation on it to spice it up, and the final section had good subtractiveness to the instrumentation for the finish. You should be proud of the progress you've made, and it shows that pushing through and learning by doing has brought you farther faster than overanalyzing things and being caught in analysis paralysis. You've also made OCR history; no one's ever had this many resubmissions of a track to finally make it through, yet the proof's in the pudding of your persistence paying dividends. Wanted to check this out in case I was going to dispute it, as I hadn't been a YES yet throughout all these revisions, but here we are! YES
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