brokenbirthday

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So, bump for mod review again.

Oh, okay. I just figured it meant that the song was a "complete song", and was using it as such. Thanks!

No need to be embarrassed. Jimi Hendrix made nothing but mistakes before he practiced. Lots and lots of practice, dude.

Dude. That's pretty fucking dope. I don't know what to say other that. It's just dope.

I really hope you don't take this the wrong way, but I couldn't listen to that for very long. That really high synth is piercing. Maybe someone else can chime in and tell me I'm crazy, but I think you definitely need to cut out the top end that synth.

Wow, you remixed two of Yamaoka's really abstract industrial tracks? Wish I was that brave. And it sounds pretty good too. I can easily imagine Ogre from Skinny Puppy singing over something like this. Parts of it may sound a little too similar to the originals though. At the same time I feel like that's a weird criticism. I'm not even sure how to critique something like this. Does OC Remix even cater to abstract music? Shit, I don't know. It sounds good though. I would love to see what some of the mods say about it.

Updated it, so I'm setting it back to finished to see if I can get anymore general critique before setting it to mod review again.

Thanks a lot! I'm definitely gonna center the vocals, I heard someone else say this as well. I liked the sort of moving incorporeal feel to them, but I definitely get the criticism. And if it's more distracting than ethereal, then I'm gonna lose the effect. Vocals will be fixed. As far as the tuning, I'm not sure. Maybe someone else can clue me in on that with another pair of ears. It may be weird that the first 2 verses are sung in a lower fashion than the chorus. It was to emphasize the fact that it's two different people (James in the verses, Mary in the chorus). Anyway, I'll see what other people think about it as well. I could just be terribly off key and not noticing. Singing is definitely my weakest musical ability, I think. As for the drums, I kind of agree with you. The issue here is that the bass line, which I consider to be kind of the driving force of the song, was built around the idea of a "four on the floor" kick and snare. This is incredibly noticeable with the chorus bass line. In fact the interplay between the bass and the drums was initial inspiration for the entire direction of the song. Maybe I could add better fills or something. Or maybe the drums are so loud that they seem to be a focus. I don't know. I'll play around with it. The snare is made up of two Yamaha DX7 snares and more modern thin "clicky" snare. Maybe that modern one is the problem with the sound. I'll definitely play around with designing a better sound for it. Again, thanks a lot for the critique. I'm gonna try and get a little more feedback and then get back to working on it with the criticism in mind.

Bump for mod review.

My first thought: the lead synth could definitely be better. Right now it sounds a bit lacking in fidelity, and a little too weak to be leading the rest of the arrangement. My intuition is saying that it should definitely be a heavily distorted electric guitar, but I recognize this as just my intuition; the main point is that needs to get the hell up and lead. It sounds like it's a bit too shy to do that, haha. I feel like this is a big part of what makes it sound unsatisfying. Also, I'm really not feeling that oscillating synth that comes in at about 1:30. I'm not sure what I would replace it with, or whether I'd keep it at all, I just feel like it isn't adding to the song as much as it's taking away. I actually really like the opening. It has a nice atmosphere and I can definitely see the Mass Effect influences. And I really like the bass. The arrangement as a whole isn't bad. It's definitely not shitty. I've heard shitty. This isn't. But this also isn't living up to it's full potential, which I feel like it has a lot of. I would start with finding better sounds to drive the arrangement before worrying too much about the structure and transitions, though.

I don't have my headphones on me, but even over my speakers that sounds a LOT better. You had to sort of strain to get the melody out the previous version, but it's right there in the center on this one. Very good work! =)

Bump again, because still no comments and finished. I guess I'll put it up for mod review if it stays without comments for a while.

This is such a great song. And your arrangement does it justice, in a great way. This is sooo good.

Holy shit, I really like this a lot. I don't have any insightful feedback, I just wanted to say that. This is really good work. From my limited orchestral experience, it sounds mixed well, and I really like the arrangement. Good work!