[KingTiger]

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This is a song I made for the SZRC. It's a mashup/remix of "Panic Puppet" from the Genesis/Mega Drive version of Sonic 3D Blast and "Rusty Ruin" from the Saturn version of Sonic 3D Blast. I wrote original lyrics for it, and I rapped and my friend Martha sang. It's a bit different from the SZRC version in that it now has Martha singing on it, whereas in the SZRC version she didn't have the chance to add her voice so I heavily vocoded my sick, off-pitch voice. This new version is much better

Anyway, I'm not sure if this is or can be OCR caliber/style, but here it is anyway.


http://stuff.kingtigermusic.com/musi...rtha%20Vox.mp3

EDIT: updated the guest vox with vocoder effect: http://stuff.kingtigermusic.com/musi...x%20Vocded.mp3

EDIT: newer version: http://stuff.kingtigermusic.com/musi...vocode%202.mp3

EDIT: "final" version: http://stuff.kingtigermusic.com/musi...et%20FINAL.mp3

[SuperiorX]

Ya know when I first heard this song I thought it was a little goofy, but it's really grown on my throughout the week. The positive lyrics are a welcome surprise as well. It really reminds me of something too, but I just can't place it and it's been bugging me. Were you influenced by any band/song in particular when you made this?

Now for a few comments... yeah your friend's vocals on this definitely is an improvement. I like it. That first "lost" sounds a bit off-key at 0:47 (or could be the instruments). So does the note at 1:19-1:20. The word "the" at 2:21 sounds like it was cut short and should flow more into "world" a bit more too. I like her singing, but the clean, un-edited recording seems a little out of place with the rest of the electronic-heavy song. Maybe vocode or auto-tune her voice just a bit to give it some of that 'digital' feel. Not as much as you vocoded your voice in the original version, but just a bit to make it fit in with the overall feel of the song a bit more.

Not sure about OCR caliber, maybe with a bit more polish. The instrument that first enters at 0:12 sounds like some MIDI guitar. That could definitely be upgraded, but other than that I like the instrumentation choices, most of the synths and piano mesh together pretty well.

Nice job!

[Hicky Eighth]

I think it is in the OCremix caliber yes, but need polishment, like reverb in the voice, and some instruments looks like MIDI, need to upgrade this too.

[KingTiger]

I put an updated link in the first post, all I did was vocode Martha's vocals.

The instrument in the beginning is a clavier, not a guitar. Don't know what to say about it, other than that :/

This song isn't going to change anymore, I'll probably try to submit it but if it gets a "no" I'm still leaving it the way it is... I don't feel like working on it anymore.

[timaeus222]

It's sounding good so far. I know you want to stop working on it, but I think you should anyway. Try again on a fresh day. I do think it can be improved. I'd advise you to strengthen and brighten up the snare. Layer on some high end.

Also, the instruments seem lo-fi in general. If you can, try replacing the instruments with "better" choices. i.e. The poly saw can have a slightly wider sound, similar to synth strings. The clavier (or I'll just call it a keys instrument) can have some more reverb and delay. I think you can do better.

Good luck!

[Delicious Heart Lyrics]

Hi King Tiger!

I'm listening your track right now. One of the better tracks in the sonic zone remix competition I think.

Well, I guess a wind instrument accompaniement somewhere will be funny, to add a little more variations.

And for the end, maybe you should extend it just a little more.

I looking forward on your progress and I'm impatient to see your track on Ocremix

Good luck !!

[KingTiger]

Thanks for the feedback everyone! I'm glad you all are enjoying it. I think I will make some changes to some of the instrumental parts and then I'll submit it.

Have you all voted in the SZRC yet? You can download all the mixes from the main page here, and you can vote here (just make sure you vote on every pair of tracks otherwise none of your votes count!).

[SuperiorX]

I like the vocoded vocals a bit better, nice!

Originally Posted by KingTiger

Have you all voted in the SZRC yet? You can download all the mixes from the main page here, and you can vote here (just make sure you vote on every pair of tracks otherwise none of your votes count!).

I see what you're doing there... and I approve!

[Damashii!!]

man, this mix is so catchy and that chorus has been banging in my head since i heard it back in SZRC.
the mixing and arrangement is extremely clean and groovy, and i only have two (and a half, i guess) suggestions.

1) you should add a thicker clap sound/sample that plays on every other 4th beat kind of like this http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature...eyNwzWwk#t=51s

2) it wouldn't be too bad to add a chorus or doubler effect to the main vocals during some of the verses just to add more grit to the rapping parts. you could also run the "i'm sorry but i won't be a puppet" parts through a telephone-effect filter or something like that.

2.5)
hmm, i'm leaning more towards the original version from the SZRC because i liked how the vocals sounded during the chorus. the singer in the new version(s) has a nice voice and it's good that the clarity of the lyrics is getting out more, but (and this is probably just my own preference to vocal effects) i think you should increase the width of the vocoder part or at least put some more of that cool, weird effect from the original version on the vocals.

if you want you could send me an instrumental and an acapella version and i can mix the effects a little bit and record another vocoder part to show you what i mean, but i think you'll get the gist of what i'm saying.
sounds really good, and i have much more respect for it now after allowing the lyrics to fester in my head for a longer time.

[KingTiger]

New link in the first post.

I doubled parts of the verses, did the telephone effect on the "puppet" parts, and added the clap on beat four.