Seeing that you're looking for advice and direction, I'm not reading this as an actual eval; that would be something that you intend to submit to OCR, and are looking for an evaluator or judge to pop in and give how they believe it would be judged.
If that IS what you were looking for, a (quick) eval: this is a VERY conservative interpretation of the source, with the instrumentation and arrangement being very similar to what was provided in the soundtrack. While covers are not inherently an issue, that would definitely earn this track a rejection on (or even prior to) the panel.
Again, though, I doubt that's what you were looking for, so a heads up: only use Mod Review / Eval for the purpose of submitting a track. As a standalone track (and NOT looking at it as a future OCR submittion), it's clean, and it flows quite well. The use of sidechaining was subtle, but it does leave some room for the four-to-the-floor well enough. It's something that's less noticeable, but it does improve the clarity of the track, so props to some solid chaining.
I enjoy the track, and feel like it would've worked well as a re-arrangement for a DS or 3DS version of the game. Thanks for sharing.