Like previous posters I really liked some of the ideas. The broken beat, the deliberate pacing and strange blend of sounds. On the downside though the mix was unbalanced with some really loud/treble heavy elements (bells, synth lead). The dissonance was sometimes a bit too much, try to scale down on that in favor of more obvious source usage.
Arrangement had the rhythm going for it but not much else. More overt usage of the melody, preferably slightly arranged, together with one or two counter melodies would definitely kick the arrangement up a notch. Right now, it's a bit lacking when it comes to source and interpretation.
Overall, you show some promise but the track is very rough around the edges. Keep improving, check the WIP boards, #ocrwip and other music forums for help on doing that and I'll see you again here soon!
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