The noise at :12-:14 sounds really awkward, because it feels as if it's supposed to build something larger. Bring the melody in the beginning parts out a little more, it's still being overshadowed by the electronics. I like the piano alot, the "guitar" sounds a little wierd, might want to work on that.
Ending feels too abrupt. Overall, it still feels unfinished, especially the synth parts, but it has alot of potential to be great.