My problem with this mix is that with all its intricacies, it's still thin, sparse, and weak. The introing synth guitar (?) panned right is notated strangely, making for weird tonalities, and it's a feeble sound to begin with. Drums are doing neat stuff, but they too sound limp, especially with stagnant velocities. Enlivening these samples with some major tweakage and filling the dry holes in the sequencing could make this sound lively and rich.
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