Man, I swear, I have such a hard time thinking that any remix of this song is not a joke ever since ReCapitated.
Anyway, this is definitely entry-level quality, the entire song kind of reminds me of oldschool MIDI soundtracks. It reminds me of like, the very very first stuff I ever made in Fruity Loops, before I really even had a clue how to use it. Don't be discouraged, Luke, we all start somewhere, and you can only get better the more you use it. Layering drum patterns, and applying FX creatively is something that will help you in future projects. And it sounds like you're using a simple sample for your bass. Try out a nice synth, any of Image Line's if you've got 'em, if not, try Synth 1, it's free and has some pretty decent presets to get you started. And then learn to experiment with automating different parameters to keep the energy alive. Also, try to create a better ending on future tracks. Can't just let it stop like that, it's like smacking into a brick wall. At the very least, create an automation clip for your master volume and do a fadeout.
Keep at it.
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