[evktalo]

WIP: https://www.dropbox.com/s/o534cpxz6f...2020120726.mp3

As per sggod89's suggestion, cut put a low pass on the square lead. Maybe should do the same on (most of) the saw too.. I also adjusted the background hums, and put a little reverb on the bass line. All in all pretty small tweaks in the update. I should mix/master this properly and mark it Finished. So I should start learning about proper mixing mastering. (: I do notice that the waveform gets a lot louder in the end where there's tons of leads going all over the place, so that'd probably need some special (levels, eq?) attention.

--Eino

-- old:

WIP: https://www.dropbox.com/s/llhr2cxj3g...2020120707.mp3

Source

This is a tweaked version of my PRC220 entry. (In case you have heard that version, I've tweaked the structure a little and improved mixing). Arrangement-wise I've taken the basic 8-note melody/figure and based the bassline on it (I've "shifted" it to the offbeat, rhythmically) and built from there. The title is a bitter one, I would love to play Portal 2 (co-op!!!), but I get motion sickness from the game.

I don't have any big ideas how to develop this further, I'm thinking I'll just need to mix/master this properly. I'm aiming to get this posted on OCR. I appreciate any comments on

• the track in general
• the recognizability of the source
• if the sounds sound good enough
• if there's anything (too) strange going on with the melodies (which are a maybe little wild at times)
• if the structure feels like a complete piece

Thanks in advance & hope you enjoy

--Eino

[sggod89]

The mix has improved. I would try throwing a low pass filter on some of those lead synths at around 9-10k, otherwise it eats up the cymbals and the other synths. Maybe boost the horns a tad too. I think it sounds pretty good man.

Other than that I don't have much advice. I've never posted to the OCR, so I can't be of any help on that subject.

[evktalo]

Thanks sggod89! I put the low pass on the square lead, and it didn't seem to hurt, at least. What to do you mean by horns btw, the saw lead? Should I low pass them as well?

New WIP: https://www.dropbox.com/s/o534cpxz6f...2020120726.mp3

In addition to square lead, I also adjusted the background hums, and put a little reverb on the bass line. All in all pretty small tweaks in the update. I should mix/master this properly and mark it Finished. So I should start learning about proper mixing mastering. (: I do notice that the waveform gets a lot louder in the end where there's tons of leads going all over the place, so that'd probably need some special (levels, eq?) attention.

--Eino

[tesselode]

I honestly just don't like this remix. The synths all seem obnoxious and not nice sounding to me. I think it's because they're all just playing separate parts at full volume. There's no subtlety to any of it.

The artistic decision is yours, but I would have some quieter sounds that blend in with each other, and then put a couple of stronger lead sounds on top of that.

(Note: My opinion of this may be skewed by just having listened to a very quiet orchestral song.)

[Elder Kirby]

The beginning is too forced and the transition is just terrible at 1:57.
Also, I feel like you stayed too true to the source, which isn't good.
Overall, the mix feels very dry and up front. A lot of sections are nice and full, but others are very dry in comparison. One such section is the part starting at 1:27--I feel like it would help if a high-freq counterpoint played in the background here. Some more stereo enhancement can help.

Other than that, the mix is pretty darn good; I like it!

[evktalo]

Many, many thanks to both for your critical comments! I envision that this piece should be quite in-your-face, but I'll be giving the dynamics and the sounds (including dryness) some thought. I have a tendency to first make a sparse mix/arrangement that needs to be filled up. I probably need to give it a rest to hear it afresh myself.

--Eino