I like the overall sound design, pleasant vibe. Especially the strings, fantastic. Needs a bit more punch with the drums and bass imo. Doesn't shake my system much, even with the bass boost on.
A huge complaint I have here: I feel like the backing sticks out too much, especially right at the beginning. If it was being used as a transition into some original content, it would be fine. But it sticks out in an almost jarring way with seemingly no purpose.
And, of course, you need some original content. It doesn't need to be crazy, as I found out in getting a remix accepted recently. Just own it, make it your own. You'll notice that a lot of accepted remixes here start with the source material, divert into an original section, then return to the source to close out. The sky's the limit!
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