There's a crackling sound during the rhythm guitar section at 3:22. The bell-like arpeggiators are occasionally too loud.
Drum work could really use some more crash cymbals. The kick drums and crash cymbals are a little quiet as they are. Beef them up a bit.
Overall, I'd say keep working on it. What you have so far is enjoyable, but you need to do some more work to get this to a really good level. Gonna keep it anyway.