Radiowar
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maybe but discussion about spoon is never a bad thing!
'everything hits at once' is probably one of my favourite songs ever
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uhh isn't "do a barrel roll" peppy's line?
i personally wouldn't include it because i think it's a played out joke but it's your song
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oo smrpg yay
hmm unless you are steve reich you should not have such heavy repetition.
i'm gonna go by section here. from 0:00 to 0:32 you basically have a piano repeating a very small bit of the source with strings repeating the same two chords over and over. one thing this mix has going for it is the polyphony; i would suggest writing a more creative string part to emphasize that, as well as using more than the same 1 bar of the source over constantly.
0:33 to 1:01 has most of the same problems, only now you have introduced rock drums into an orchestral arrangement...doesn't work here at all. also, the part writing for the instruments is very noticeably amateurish. same problem with you going back and forth between two chords and maybe 10 notes of melody.
drum "solo" 1:02 to 1:11 is ridiculously out of place, not to mention if you're going to include a drum solo then at least throw in some fills (it really should be one big fill anyways) instead of looping the same 1 bar pattern.
1:12 to 1:40 is just a repeat of the previous section, no new ideas introduced. that is not necessarily wrong, but in the case of this song it is.
key change at 1:41 to 2:08 is long overdue...unfortunately no new ideas introduced here either, and really a key change is the best place to do that
finally at 2:10 something new, but you quickly return to the old loop. and then it goes to the outro.
the short version of all that is you are not using enough of the source, and the little bit that you do use is used far too often. what i'd recommend is that you work on creating a more engaging and dynamic piece with more polyphony and melodic variation (if you plan on doing this sort of minimalist-orchestral style). i'd recommend looking at some of the wingless' remixes like aphrodite oceanus or pearlsong for ideas on how to take a relatively short musical idea and expand it into a full song.
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the rapping is pretty nice
but i can't stand that lead synth...just sounds really out of place to me
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just a little thing about the vocals samples in the intro, it might sound better if you could put them together in a way that they sounded cohesive, preferably all the same person saying them. right now it sounds too much like you have taken voice samples from different characters at random
also holy crap this song is loud
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it is hard to make a super mario bros. arrangement that is interesting imo
but goddamn this is just on another level
excellent
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i think the thing that threw people off is that you added passing notes and syncopation
which are all legitimate ways of re-arranging a melody
so i can understand why it seems really liberal but that doesn't make it wrong
the comparison helps but i think there is a wrong note at 0:10 D:
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i found it here:
the melody is a lot less liberal than the last version i had heard...i'm surprised bgc had so much trouble finding any connection to the original.
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dang i was hoping that this would make it ):
i mean there are definitely other songs on this site that are just as liberal
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wow i think i like this better than the zelda one you did
and i don't even like the 600 AD song that much
yeah this is awesome
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this is great i enjoyed it
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here's the source if you or anyone else is interested
not that it should be an issue since i basically play the source verbatim in the intro and the rest of the song is just a series of variations on it
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hmm after listening to it again i think i rushed the performance too much
i'll probably have to re-record this anyways...
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this is pretty cool. it's hard to tell without a real guitar but i am getting a bittersweet symphony type of vibe from the song, with the rock/strings combination. i personally think that might be something to think about. another thing is that the strings are a little too dark, maybe brighten them up a bit. other than that...gj.
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the intro synths and hi hat don't sound the greatest but once the song gets going it isn't too bad
i guess one thing about the arrangement is after the source finishes in the first half the song sort of wanders off into a developing section mostly unrelated to the source that goes on too long. and in the last section it sounds like a piano comes in and plays the melody...it might be a good idea to give that more presence as a contrast to the harsh synths. other than that i can't think of anything else that wouldn't just be nitpicking.
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this is an arrangement of the winter theme from harvest moon that i've been sitting on for awhile, trying to find a decent way to record it. i didn't want to do it using samples because my midi keyboard isn't the greatest for performing solo piano...this is probably the best live recording i can get out of the equipment i have.
anyways since i just submitted a remix last night i have to wait for awhile before submitting this and thought maybe i could at least get some opinions first.
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During the breakout the hats are very soft, almost to the point where they sound like extra noise instead of rhythms. The kick sounds very weak compared to the booming bass line in the breakout also. It's the right sound, it's just it feels the kick and bass aren't moving in sync as well as they could.
yeah i know what you mean, i guess i just got used to it after working on this for so long. i added a sort of backup bass synth to create a kind of delay effect that kept the same rhythm as the drums so hopefully that helps.
also i didn't really notice what you were talking about with the middle section being unclear until i added a compressor to the master track...that really made a huge difference.
anyways i submitted it last night so i guess you'll have to wait for that update...i think i've got a pretty good chance, could go either way
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yeah i know it needs more variation...at this point though i think melodically it is varied enough, it's the drums that need work. and i was saving that for last because i hate doing drums...
and which elements in particular do you think need EQing? i thought it was all pretty clear there, except possibly the strings.
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i think you got the wrong artist there
anyways song's not bad
very steely dan
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another update
thought a guitar solo would be a good way to break the monotony
but i don't have a guitar so used a synth one instead...i think it works pretty well actually
maybe it's just because i'm getting used to the song but the repetition doesn't bother me much anymore.
not there yet but getting close
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the idea you're describing could definitely work but it isn't really conveyed here...i think this is too rough to really say.
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quick little update, nothing huge though changed the drums in the middle section. everything is still repetitive but at least it has more energy now.
oh and if anybody has any tips on how to do snare rolls properly (at around 2:22) that would help. i'm not sure mine sound that great.
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ahh ok. don't worry i am dumb hurr
anyways i made a new version doing all sorts of different things except it's still really repetitive because i'm tired and don't feel like making it interesting today
the transitions still aren't 100% but i think the idea is there
also threw in some vocal samples for whatever reason
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oooh, so YOU'RE alexhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
yeah why
The bass string in the intro I'm not totally feeling. Or maybe I am, it's just standing out too much.yeah i thought it might be...turned it down a bit, but not too much because i like this dissonance
add a cutoff on a slow snare so it's like they're fading, then bring them back in.uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Outtro, people will probably complain that it's the same as the intro, etc. etc.yeah...couldn't think of anything. though avaris' idea of a piano thing could probably work there...
Perhaps play some sort of sine bassline in the intro? Help keep things interesting.hmm that definitely adds a different feel to it that i didn't think of before. almost gives it a groove haha
yeah i thought it might...the idea of feedback doesn't really work with this song anymore anyways. i took off the hi pass and i think it adds a good metallic sound to the pads now than just having high pitched noise.Big thing the intrument playin in the high high freq range is staying up there too long. Eventually it just feels and sound like my ears are ringing.
Help I got rejected:(
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uhh yeah