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Oneiric

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    Pennsylvania

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    2. Maybe; Depends on Circumstances
  • Software - Digital Audio Workstation (DAW)
    Studio One
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    Arrangement & Orchestration

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  1. There is one issue with this version that I didn't notice until literally just a minute ago listening through it again, which is a tempo mistake toward the end of the track that happens twice. because of how I wrote the parts it involved tempo and time changes to sound right, and I slid the track back by 4 measures to add a bit to the intro, not thinking about the time changes and where that would leave the changes in the track, so I do need to go back and change that. this was more so I could post the track and get some feedback here about the overall sound. I'm pretty comfortable with t
  2. I love this, not really a remix, but you've done an awesome job updating the source
  3. Its not bad, though I feel it focuses too much on the melody of the source. While there is a good job of changing the way it gets played throughout, all of the changes feel just slapped together with no rhyme or reason. An original riff or two to split up the source would help diversify the track and make transitions sound more natural. Also, i would vary your drum lines a little. Add fills, tempo changes to indicate transitions, and just plain add a little variation to a few measures to make the track have better flow and more personality. Lastly, the lead that comes i
  4. Have been working on this song for a few weeks now and has completely taken over the last four or five days. Glad to finally have it out. It is being alone on a peaceful trip through space, staring from the windows at the stars around you. It is the relaxation from the beauty of the sight before you. It is the brief moment as relaxation turns to panic as the power to all of your systems fail one by one. It is the suffocating fear of dying alone, adrift in a sea of nothingness. It is the overwhelming feeling of terror as you hear something else moving on the ship with you. It is the warm f
  5. Sounds good, but I'm a sucker for anything in uncommon times and that riff in 5 is quite nice. it flows great and sounds awesome. I only have one question. What is up with that snare noise? I love me a nice poppy snare sound (even if it sounds slightly out of place in most metal), but that snare sound is like a woodblock almost. It does say rough draft, so I'm not sure if you plan to keep that specific tone, but I feel that the snare needs a sound that is less poppy and tight. Also, The bass kick has a very shallow feel to it. Something with a little more body to the note instead of just
  6. I agree, the drums are a little too front and center, I think they need to be mixed a little better into the track, the bass and snare sounds mostly are what stand out. Also agree that things generally sound pretty muddled, and the volume jumps up for no apparent reason most of the way through. While this helped the drums feel a little better mixed in it has the side effect of making the backing track disappear. It also makes everything feel unfinished. I agree, rather than the volume jump I think it would be better to make a change there for the rest of the song, maybe another instrument
  7. Thanks for the feedback! I actually recorded this before I was actually very familiar with the concept of velocity, having worked mostly with less organic sounds previously. I wasn't sure if I wanted to rework the track with a more humanized feel. I'm actually very fond of this track now though so I'll probably go back and do that at some point in the near future, as well as giving it a better production overall, and possibly trying to change up the instrumentation slightly to further differentiate it from the original. Again, thanks!
  8. Okay, so first thing I noticed is the constant changing of the camera angle. I had to watch the video a few times to fully catch a couple things. I follow frets much easier than tones when focusing on what is being played so the constant changing angle threw me for a loop. As for the music itself... the riff was definitely catchy. For me the main issue to address is that the main riff repeats far too many times. As the bare bones structure of a song it works, but there is nothing to differentiate where the intro ends and the verse begins. Throughout there is no variation to the riff at a
  9. First the music. So I didn't listen to the Undertale track or the Wario track as I don't know the source. I think the two Bowser's Castle themes work very well to me. They balance chill and menacing very well, and the trance-like vibe to them is awesome. I honestly can't really think of anything bad to say about them. Help Me didn't go over as well for me, but I think that's more personal taste than anything about your talent. Which leads me to your channel... these tracks paled next to the two Horizon tracks you have posted. I haven't gone into much of what you had up, but those two tra
  10. It feels like there's a solid concept here, and on the positive I do like the vibe from it. It does feel like it sticks fairly close to the source material, something I myself have a problem with. Really, my biggest critique is that the song feels like it goes nowhere and feels long for the sake of it. For me, there was far too much repetition. The only thing I remember from the song after having listened to it twice is the bass line, which mostly stuck because it played the same measure on repeat. In the source the bass line is used to drive the song, it sets the chord under the lead and
  11. Pretty simple track, I kept the instrumentation pretty similar to the original, just rewrote the song in 3.
  12. Third finished track of my vgm demo project. This one was written with the image of a tribal, arctic village. Children are running around, the men are fishing and the women are relaxing after lunch's prep and clean up, sunlight glancing off of the snow and water in a dazzling show. It's then coupled with a playful, easygoing sense of camaraderie like two close friends having a toast after a nice catch. Same thing, any critiques or advice are welcome.
  13. Second finished track of my vgm demo project. This one was written to the image of a small hamlet in the forest, still and quiet as a layer of mist and dew covers the ground at dawn, the light dim, just before everyone wakes up to go about the days business. I tried to capture that still feeling that early mornings seem to exude so well and marry it to an almost idyllic atmosphere. Any advice or critiques are completely welcome, always looking to improve myself.
  14. On Love Like You right now. Um, I'm going to start by saying I like what you're working with here, my critiques are going to be smaller things because so far I'm hearing the backbone of a pretty good pop song here. Mainly I think your voice should go slightly lower in the mix. Right now it doesn't quite overpower the rest, but because of its volume you can hear the slight imperfections very clearly. I wouldn't drop it much deeper in the mix, but just a very little would go a long way to blending yourself with the music more. Structurally I feel like there's a solid structure, and the vocal mel
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