This sounds very electronic. Not the cool sounding electronic, but the fake sounding kind. The dynamic shifts are there, but are really lacking any power. Sometimes the melody is going to fast for the synthetic sounds to keep up, which makes it sound very odd. The synthetic sound clash a lot, as if they where not ment to go with each other. They just sound very awkward. Then there is the part at around 4 minutes when there is an awkward pause, as if you didnt know how to bridge the two parts together so you just left a space.
Overall ther is just way too much clash between the awkard sounds coming from the electronic instruemnts, which give the song an extreamly un-natural feel to it.