I think it's gonna be hard to comment on this, since the vocals are most likely going to be the focal point of this mix. Taking that into consideration, I think it's off to a good start, though I think I might give those drums a little more punch and do a little more with that hihat.
Maybe these two songs may inspire you, they've worked for me in the past:
Again, it'll probably be easier to comment once we hear the vocals...hope my 2 cents help at all.