I agree with Sir_NutS and I will add a couple of things. The kick being used is a tuned kick which isn't really appropriate in this type of song, and it is not in tune with the song anyway. A plain punchy kick with a minimal tail would work better here. During the heavy parts of the song there are too many elements competing for space both in frequency and soundscape placement. The different parts also conflict sometimes in writing, which happens when there are too many complex parts playing at once. Interesting ideas but definitely needs some arrangement and production work.
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