Hey thanks for the reply!
Yes I think the beats need revised. I left the hats out in the epic harmony part as well, which need to be added in. I think the intro itself should crescendo and needs more life as well. I'll hopefully be able to work on it after I graduate from college here. Maybe I'll have time before then. Thanks for the feedback so far!
This piece ended up taking on a life of its own. I use the synths I think sound absolutely the best to my tastes and I let the instruments tell the story. To me, it sounded somewhat oppressive and overbearing and that's the direction it headed. All my synth and drum choices are heavily informed by Metroid Prime, Half-Life 2, rock music, metal music...etc. There actually is an exact synth used in Metroid Prime 2 in this piece of music.