The percussion during the verse sections sounded very basic and also had no presense, not cutting through the soundscape at all; for example, the drums just get buried around :16 after more elements came in.
The mixing was very murky for the first 22 seconds. When the melody came in at :23, it cut through, but the soundscape was still very cluttered until the dropoff at 1:06. The timing of the synth at :49 was extremely stiff-sounding, as well as the lead.
At 1:27, there were some added grace notes into the chorus section, but not much variation aside from that.
Around 1:51, it sounded like the track looped aside from some understated accenting lines which were a good additional but didn't add much to the picture to stop this from feeling underdeveloped and repetitive as an interpretive arrangement.
At 2:37, we finally reached another distinct section, and I was digging it. The drums cut through much better and added some movement to the music, and the little blips were a nice touch. The keyboard/computer sound combo at 2:58-3:14 sounded basic, but I can live with it. 3:14-'s brief section would have been a good moment to have some quick but meaningful variation with the writing before heading to your finish at 3:29. Nice sound to the final few seconds at 3:29.
This does move in the right direction in terms of fleshing out the source tune, but overall it's too conservative, underdeveloped, repetitive, and lacking dynamic contrast for the first 2 1/2 minutes. The production/mixing also needed to be addressed so that the drumwork stood out more during the verses instead of fading into the background and not lending movement/energy to the piece. Feel free to try to rework this one some, Markus, but even if you don't, you show potential and I hope we hear more submissions from you.
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