yeah the guitar is hurting , and the snare drum sounds like its underwater, inside a coffin - I guess that's fitting for the game
But yeah, the song takes forever to kick into some actual melody stuff, but the samples are really...uh...not good to put it nicely >_>
At least the bass instrument is fine
PLUS there's a lot of clipping, so using a limiter would really help here - that and general volume reducing. Which is ironic because I had to pump the volume up here to be able to even hear it.
Sorry for the bad news man, but this track needs a complete make over. Here's the summary:
-guitar samples need to be changed to something less grating and real sounding (or a completely different instrument altogether). Mind you, I feel your pain, because guitars are tough to emulate, it's better to use real guitars...that or you mooch off of a guitarist OR buy a very, very expensive guitar synth which i do not recommend you do.
-snare drum sounds like it died 2 years ago - get a better snare sample or process it better!
-it takes too long to get into the melodies (perhaps thats because the starting is just too grating due to bad samples)
-Reduce the clipping and pump up the volume (after u get better samples)
-use a limiter - it will save your life
-most of all DON'T GIVE UP. And don't let our comments put you down - I made that mistake way back when and I still kinda do - but trust me, we mean the best for you. Good luck in your future remixes