I'll do my best to nitpick my way though your tune.
First let me say, great stuff, nice and relaxing. I love the source tune, and I love your realistic sounds and programming (playing?).
Possible 'lethal judge panel' problems:
1 - (still) not enough variation
2 - mix too close to source material - it's probably too 'safe' right now
- the first minute isn't that interesting... Try to do something crazy with it... other chords, New 'build up' melody that incorporates a few little things from the gerudo theme... as in.. hint to gerudo, but have a different mood.. then when the theme and it's chords enter it's gonna be really awesome and magical.
- later on, introduce a countermelody in a range lower or higher. Perhaps that intro melody i suggested. Or improvised guitar, bass, trombone, marimba or piano playing.
- that repetitive hand drum rhytm is nice for a few moments but gets annoying real soon. It really stands out on my speakers because it's so much to the left... make it more stereo and vary it up! Leave it out (completely) in a few parts, and when the song progresses, Go more crazy with the hand drumming (perhaps go a bit 'tribal' for a few moments) Also make more changes in the rhytm! Use some different type of drums with different patterns here and there.
- throw in a B-section at some point with completely original material (that still fits the style) - good for both variation and more self-input. Be bold.
I hope this helps.
Now up and at it!