ARRANGEMENT / INTERPRETATION
[X] Too conservative - sticks too close to the source
[X] Borrows heavily from non-source material (it's a simplistic dance pattern)
PRODUCTION
[X] Too quiet
[X] Low-quality samples
[not for this genre] Unrealistic sequencing
[X] Generic/cliche sound choices
[X] Drums have no energy
PERFORMANCE (live recorded audio/MIDI parts)
STRUCTURE
[X] Not enough changes in sounds (eg. static texture, not dynamic enough)
[X] Pace too plodding
[X] Too repetitive
[X] Abrupt ending
PERSONAL COMMENTS
The choir/vox is weak IMO, the drums need more oomph ESPECIALLY for a dance song. No one wants to dance to a weak beat :'(. Just compress the drums a bit and maybe layer them with panning techniques to make them come out more. And I also think that this remix is a bit of a downgrade from the original, just because it has a more filled-out soundscape and better sequenced drums (sorry man). Moreover, this wip needs a few more supporting instruments, a counter melody and some other ear candies, as the composition itself is overly simplistic and repetitive. I've been through this before and still am trying to make my way through it, but I gotta be honest. If I lied to you, and you submitted this and got instantly rejected, I wouldn't be doing you a favor. You've got potential though . (and as a positive side, your bass sample is nice, just its line needs more variety )