This version's defintiely an improvement, but there's still a handful of gnawing issues that are holding it down, mostly on the arrangement side of things.
The lack of compression/punch on your drums has been pointed out already, but I'm not sure if it's been mentioned that you use the same drum loop for the entire song. Switching up the loops a bit and expanding on the drumwork as you progress through the song would really help bring up the intensity later on. The stuttering drums worked in the intro so maybe you could try employing a similar effect later in the song.
As for the synth writing, it sticks pretty close to the original which isn't exactly kosher by OCR standards. Arranging the melody to make a bit more unique or personalized, or even some soloing at the climax of the song would not only bring this more into ReMix territory, but also make the song more interesting and less repetitive.
The last thing that stuck out to me was the lack of bass on the song - I can tell you've got a synth playing a bass part, but it's really quiet and leaves that end of the frequency spectrum feeling rather empty.
Not bad work overall, this definitely captures the cheery, punchy essence of the source tune. Just fine tune some of the things mentioned above and try to make the arrangement side of it feel a bit more personalized, and I think this would work a lot better as a ReMix. Keep at it!