Really fresh direction to take this track, that's always a joy to hear.
Vocals need work, but that's pretty much covered. The timing on the rhythm guitar feels a little off at the beginning of the second verse, it's a little uncomfortable. Also as a possible fun addition, the bass could become more active during the outro fade rock-out, it sounds like there'd be room for it and it'd be quite natural. Good luck with the track, it's very promising!
--Eino