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At first glance, I'd say this is too conservative for ocr standards. You've basically kept the song structure, melodies, & feel the same as the original - just with different sounds. It would need a lot more personalization to be above the arrangement bar.
I was admittedly pretty thrown off at first by the dissonance. I listened to your mix before listening to the source, though, and I now see where it comes from. Still, though it may have worked in the original, I don't feel like it's working for a dance mix like you've got here.
On the production side, you've got some good energy here with the beat and bass synth going. There's a lot of clutter here with the various parts. I'd look into cutting down on reverb. Also, a lot of synths are fighting for the same sonic space - there's just too much "stuff" going on with similar textures. Try to balance out parts a bit more so backing parts odn't occupy so much space, the leads are able to shine out, while the beat still has the punch to drive the mix.
One extra note, the sound effect on two of the transitions seemed way too loud and didn't really feel like it served it's purpose as a bridge between the parts (assuming that's what you were going for).
Overall, you've got some nice synths, and a nice base with your underlying drums & bass, but more work is needed on personalization/writing, mixing & balance.