<instert phallic reference to mix title>
Just some initial impressions:
Took to long to start up, was a little repetitve
synths are pretty vanilla - layer for a better effect
i liked the piano part, good job on that
drums are repetitive, try switching up the part so it sounds fresh
overall it seems pretty empty, i think with some better leads and more layers, it could be really cool.
Sorry if that sounded sporadic; i was writing while listening.