Analysis:
» 0:00 - 0:18 - Nice ambient intro. Appreciate the effects coming in at 0:10
» 0:18 - 0:27 - The first time through the melody gets a tiny bit lost.
» 0:28 - 0:34 - Adding the harmony helps it stick out a bit.
» 0:34 - 0:37 - Nice drum lead-in. The sound of the drums work well for the feel you have going on right now
» 0:37 - 0:46 - The strings add a really nice touch to it. Building in the layers. But it almost sounds a little bit quiet. I dunno.
EDIT 1: (Jan 9th, 2007; 2:28PM)
» 0:37 - 0:46 - In addition to the strings you have a synth playing octaves in a 3, 3, 3, 3, 4 pattern. Nice addition, builds the layers, no longer requires the strings to pop out.
» 0:46 - 0:55 - New synth and a new take on the melody. The run down starting at 0:51 sounds a little bit rough. Not sure what to, though.
» 0:55 - 1:14 - This new arpeggio type synth coming in really contributes to the song in a way that makes me happy in my pants.
» 1:05 - 1:14 - Same with the dark organ you have going on. Really gives you that SMW Castle feel.
Conclusion
Pretty damn good for 0:51 seconds. Will be waiting for an update.
EDIT 1: (Jan 9th, 2007; 2:28PM)
In less than a day, the awesomeness of this mix has increased tenfold. Keep giving me updates and I'll gladly keep giving feedback.