Huh, that's interesting. I thought I'd stayed pretty rigidly in D harmonic minor (with a few exceptions? like in the main motif) but I'll examine it in finer detail later. Really appreciate this close listening you're doing for my little track. Makes me feel like I need to do everything I can to make it better!
From your comments, it seems like my efforts to keep the arrangement safe were a little too successful, and that the riskier parts of the arrangement may have been the wrong risks. A lot to think about!
Thank you for sharing your creation with us Daniel. The overall feel to it is very special, not sure how to describe it. I don't know many other piano pieces that produce this mood (then again, I don't know too many piano pieces!).
I did find myself losing attention sometime after the 3:20 mark. I don't know if that's just me, or if maybe it needs a slight change to keep it interesting for the second half.
Other than that I think you did a nice job and the performance itself is also very nice. I'm still a learner-pianist myself (3rd year) and I can't wait to get to the level you're at.
I'm digging this! Any updates? I think the only thing this needs is some of those classic disco strings, if you want to take it farther in that direction. I can already kind of hear where they'd fit in.
In my experience, working with other people does indeed involve waiting, and sometimes that can get a bit frustrating. But there’s another side to it to, or at least for me: being able to work with other people does make it more enjoyable, social and educational. Depending on your individual needs and desires that may or may not be something that interests everybody, but I’ve learned bits and bobs from everybody I worked with, and that is totally worth it for me. But YMMV of course; just wanted to mention another side of it.
Yeah, the re-panning is definitely helping! I know I haven't really given much mixing advice yet, but mixing really accompanies arrangement and composition, so we should be addressing all three.
The next thing I'm hearing is that there are some harmony clashings going on; mainly, it's coming from what the woody plucked instrument (first heard at 0:14; is it a cello pizzicato?) is playing compared to the lead. It seems to be playing in a different key sometimes, and landing a major 2nd or minor 2nd interval away from the main scale. To try to make this relatable, look for spots like those where you have simultaneous notes that sound kinda like you played the chord [C C# F G# A]; an example is at 1:30 - 1:37.
I don't usually say this, but try figuring out what key you are in and what notes are in that scale so that you use mainly the notes that should harmonize with the rest of your instrumentation. Then, if you get stuck, highlight the text below this to find what key you are in.
For the most part, you are in D minor, which has the notes D, E, F, G, A, A#, C, . . . in each octave (except for the few times you play D, A, G#, A, G#, D; that G# is out of the key).
On another note, you might like this walkthrough video of a Vampire Killer remix; maybe it'll help you expand your creativity. In particular, I think the 10:53 and 16:00 marks really apply to you, but if you get the time I think the whole thing is worth watching.