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You've got a lot of potential with this concept but it doesn't feel like it's progressing as it should. It's already 2 and a half minutes and it still feels like you're in intro/buildup mode. I definitely think you could fix this by beefing up some of your sounds a bit earlier (you already did this with the drumloop which is a good start) and exploring the many other melodies that Stickerbush Symphony has to offer The bass is really a high point of this for me, I love your creative pitch bending. However, I would personally just remove the first bass note, I don't think it fits :\ One last note, the arp transition that you used twice in this WIP is really awesome, but I definitely think it could get overplayed and that you should save it for moments when it really matters. The first time you used it felt like it needed a simpler, less-powerful transition. Of course I love this though - one of my favorite genres of electronic music mixed with a brilliant source tune by a very talented remixer... all the keys for success. Just need to put some time into focusing your direction and polishing the finer points a bit Good luck!

Heh, you actually managed to make that country twangyness sound attractive. The acoustic strumming and piano definitely make the genre very enjoyable even though I'm definitely not a fan of it in general. The drum pattern is an odd choice but I'd say it works pretty well. The piano at the end is brilliant, although it feels weird having such a multi-instrumental track and then breaking it down to a solo piano piece for so long. I'd recommend keeping the general idea you've got now but incorporating another instrument or two in with most of it. Either that, or save that part for the actual ending of the song where it might feel more appropriate to use a solo piano. I personally think the second option would work better, but it'd be good to consider both Nice work though, I hope this gets finished

I'm always up for some tasteful 4-on-the-floor, and this mix certainly delivers. It's got a solid groove, but the silky-smooth production is what really makes this track memorable. Killer work man

I feel bad for ragging on this mix so much earlier - I focused a lot on production and didn't spend nearly enough time talking about the things I did like. Sorry about that :\ The drums are, of course, great as I've come to expect from Young. The chord choices are very evocative and give the mix a very nostalgic, pensive feel, which I've really come to appreciate a lot more than I let on in my previous posts. It's a great song to listen to when you want to just sit outside, watch the clouds, and contemplate.

Just bumping this to remind you that this WIP, especially, needs to be finished. All your WIPs are great but I think this one has the most potential to be absolutely amazing.

halc needs to check out the most recent version, obviously

That's an egg It's part of the scene in the game, in case you're not being sarcastic.

Yeah, I agree with Kenogu Labz that it can get a bit intense/piercing at times, I still think you should submit this to OCR. I think it's got a great chance of passing, really stellar work!

Sounds good to me dude. I'd say PM it to Liontamer and see if you can get it fasttracked back to the panel, I think it's got a good chance of passing now.

http://ocremix.org/forums/member.php?u=32957 Kill it with fire.

Sounds great man I don't really have anything else to say, I think you should submit this!

This is a great improvement from your submitted version, but it's still got a few issues. Your leads are still pretty thin for the first half of the song, a problem that is somewhat rectified later on when you make the lead a bit more prominent. I can't tell you how much it would help to get someone to play your electric guitar part live, though. There's plenty of musicians around that would be willing to do that for you, you just need to know where to look There's a lot of potential for a very emotive, powerful performance there, and since you've got the time I think you should explore that option. Otherwise, nice soundscape and ambiance, good arrangement... there's a lot going for this mix but I think getting an instrumental collaborator would bring this to the next level and make it a surefire pass

Dude, I love your intro. Stellar job The second flute (?) note is not as audible as the first, and that's honestly my favorite part of the intro so I'd like for it to be a bit more prominent, if possible. I really, really like what you did with this song and I hope you can get it posted. I agree with some of halc's criticisms, especially about the thinness of your piano sample. It sounds rather weak, which causes it to get buried/overshadowed by some of your other instruments, which in general sound a lot better. Sometimes your sustained strings on the high notes go too long and start to hurt my right ear because of how far over they're panned. Watch for that at certain times; it's not a huge problem but it is something that bugged me a few times during the song. Really good work overall, though. I was surprised by how much I liked this one! I'd really like to see a replacement for the piano sample you're using now, if at all possible, and there's a few touchups that could be made here and there. But all things considered, I think this is getting close to ready for submission.

I don't get you people. You create such an amazing song with intricate melodies, great sound choices... the works. Wonderful bass, brilliant drums, BRILLIANT intro. A-grade composition. And then you have to go and fuck it up by throwing vocals in at the least opportune moment. It boggles the mind how you thought that would be a good stylistic decision - not only do the lyrics have nothing to do with Yoshi's Island, but your singing is horrible, the pitch is off, and the lyrics are INSULTING my critiquing skills! If I wanted to have my intelligence insulted by my music, I'd just go listen to rap I don't know if it's just your compulsive need to conform to societal pressure but what you've done here is akin to taking the Mona Lisa, and then pooping all over it. Why would you do that? Ok, so let's get this worked out. Cut the vocals if there's any shred of decency left in you. If you can't bear to part with them, at least throw some autotune and filters on so it doesn't sound so gut-wrenchingly bad. Better yet, keep the lyrics that you have and recruit someone else who actually has singing talent to record them for you. At the VERY least, throw some humanizing presets over your singing so it doesn't sound so robotic. Listen to Adrenalyne Kick by zircon/BGC/Liontamer if you want to know how to properly execute spoken word vocals in your song. The vocals in that song were brilliant. The vocals in this song are garbage. Better luck next time NO OVERRIDE <3 i haet u

I like the jazzy atmosphere but it's feeling very empty right now. The bass frequencies are the only range that feels properly filled out for the whole mix - adding in some supporting pads/strings/chords to give the midranges some body, and EQing the piano writing to make it more prominent would make the mix feel a lot more properly balanced. With the piano, I've got several gripes. Your sample sounds very MIDI-ish - I know there's free samples out there that sound better than this, so replacing your piano sound would bring up the quality of this mix a lot. Watch your velocities too - with this genre especially you want to make sure that your instruments sound like they're being played by a human, and I'm not getting that feeling here Around halfway through the song, your piano riffs start conflicting and it sounds really awkward, partly because of the lack of humanization and also because the note timing just doesn't line up. Having countermelodies is definitely a plus for the song but they're clashing here. Perhaps panning the different piano parts and working out the kinks in the writing would make that section in the middle work a bit better, but as it stands it's kind of messy. I've got a bit more to say but I don't want to inundate you with too many critiques at once, so just work on the piano and filling out the soundscape more with some supporting pads/strings, and then we can talk about the other details. I'll keep my eye on this one! Good luck

Your sound choices are mostly working nicely, and I especially like how you integrated the strings - despite the fact that the sample is pretty weak, I think they work to your advantage. They add a lot of support to the mix. Some of the crazy synth mangling that you've got going on is great for the purpose of building up the energy, although more of a rising crescendo with your chords in the last section of this WIP might make the section even more effective in leading into the next verse. The one big gripe I have with this is that your drums are inconsistent and sometimes way too sparse, as djp pointed out. Right from the start I think you need to add some hi-hats or flesh out the snare/kick writing, and I think you could stand to expand/intensify your drumloops in later sections of the song, as well. This has got lots of potential, keep at it man

Hahaha, I love this! The instruments are all well mixed and balanced, pristine recording, good arrangement... nothing stopping this one from passing the panel if you were to submit it. Go for it!

Just ran a 1:30 test run on any%... I screwed up a LOT on Chain Link Chamber and Rambi Rumble, so when I do my real run I'll make sure not to mess up that much ~_^

File not found This disappoints me because I absolutely LOVE this source.

Actually, I've been itching to try out an any% complete run, I might just do that. Or I'll attempt both?

It's a work in-progress, he's obviously not finished yet. Also, way to butcher my all-time favorite source tune with your low-quality samples, bitch jay-kay, I love it

Congratulations Dee-ay! Now let's things moving again!

@Red Shadow: I think the unrealistic sequencing was what put me off more than the unrealistic samples. The sounds used were, I suppose, appropriate enough but the way certain notes are played on the piano, there's no swing/sustain/believable transition... whatever you want to call it, between the short notes, especially with the piano. The low-quality samples and robotic sequencing accentuate each others' weakness and make them more blatant. I could forgive the samples if the everything wasn't quantized so rigidly, but when those two issues culminate into one song, it's an issue that affects the listenability for me, and I've never had that problem with Ziwtra's mixes in the past, despite the fact that he's using the same samples as always. He's my most listened to OCR artist on last.fm currently so I've obviously got nothing against the kind of music he usually makes. I'm not sure what happened here :\