MOD REVIEW:
Nice sound design on this one - I'm enjoying it the old school synths used throughout. I can understand the complaint that the synths may be too vanilla/retro, but in this context I feel they're well used. The arpeggio in the beginning was particularly effective.
The production on this one is really hot, though - it sounds like the lead synths and bass are heavily limited and loud, which really makes the overall mix a mess. I recommend removing limiters and compressors and re-mixing the overall track to find a better balance to the mix, then use very little limiting to boost the volume a little, if needed. Work with it at a relatively quiet level where there is no clipping in the track, and boost the levels once you get it sounding cleaner and more crisp, overall.
The arrangement doesn't hold my attention very well. The stacking textures style of arrangement works well enough in longer tracks, since there's time to build the track, but in a track that's less than three minutes with a one minute build up there's just too little time left to spend on developing the themes and material of the source. That forces you in a position where you need to be pretty conservative for the rest of the track, just to lay the original themes out there. The source is 1:52 minutes - with the minute of build up you have, that leaves you with barely enough time to just relay the original source to the audience and end the track (which is what it sounds like you do, for this track).
I like the sound design, though, and the track overall sounds full, and is fun to listen to. I just don't think this one would be accepted on the panel, and since the issues are with the structure of the track itself and how it forces the music to be too conservative, I can't say it'd be worth trying to make it work for OCR, either. Save for the loudness issues, this is a good track - just not one that I could see OCR passing due to the site's policies.