well, nothing in this track stands out, but it's certainly not terrible. what's there is balanced fairly well, and there are some cool effects going on at times.
without going into heavy detail, some of my main concerns:
-too much repetition, very little variation
-there's no bass (or low frequencies whatsoever)
-drums could be mixed a little louder (also see: too much repetition)
-instrumentation is bland and unexpressive
-interpretation of source melody is too similar imo
is it worth pursuing? from an ocr standpoint, this has a lonnnng way to go. my honest recommendation would be to start something new, maybe try a couple of different source tunes. trying to force more inspiration into this will probably end up being more trouble than it's worth. try some new things and keep practicing - you will only improve. hope this is of help to you