Listened to the newer version.
I think you would do well to either drastically modify or get rid of the first half of this, as it's far too liberal (EDIT: I meant conservative, sorry, I always get those mixed up ) for OCR. I know it changes up with some of your own interpretation later on, but there's too much stray (wtf was I high when I wrote this? I meant straight, lol) source in this.
The production is okay, and the atmosphere gives off a feel which compliments the 'spookiness' of the composition. I think the percussion could use a boost, primarily an increase in the volume of the white noise/cymbal thing you have acting as a snare in the later half, and the lows in the bass drum you have.
I hope you keep working on this, because I really like the atmosphere here. The arrangement needs an overhaul imo, especially in the parts with more or less straight source.
One more thing...I hear something which I think is clipping in either ear at certain points throughout; it's quiet, but it's there. Or at least on my end. It wouldn't hurt to throw a limiter on the master track with no gain (and a 0.0 dB ceiling) on it in order to get rid of any possibility of clipping.