Finally, another UNATCO remix! Worth submitting? Well, it's already better than my old VGMix. Still, there's a few issues I think the judges will look for. The song doesn't really go anywhere, the song doesn't have any high points or low points. Then again, for a chill electronic piece, this isn't really required. At least in my book. You might also improve the mixing to make the song sound a bit more full - the panning is already good. Try experimenting with stereo separation and use the EQ to give the drums a bit more presence. Not so much that they drown out the synths though
I would suggest logging onto irc.enterthegame.com and joining #ocrwip for some probably better feedback. You're already cool for mixing Deus Ex, and I think this song has some potential, but force feedback [lol] out of some more people because I probably missed some key issues and I can't figure out what they are.