This is pretty good! I love how you included your reasoning for the mixing decisions.
On the positives, I like how you mixed the snare. It sounds pretty powerful. You also did a pretty good job with the guitars and cymbals.
However, I wonder why you don't give more love to the bass... I realize this particular song has quite a low tuned guitar, but bass could be a lot more noticeable. For example, cutting the Kick and boosting the bass in some low frequencies to make it stand out. Or, adding some distortion.
When comparing your mix and the original, I feel the most noticeable difference is in kick and bass. While your mix has a very clicky kick, the original one has a more balanced and powerful one. Maybe some boosting in the lower frequencies could help!
Also, for the click in the Kick, one frequent technique is to make a separate track for that. You send the Kick signal to that track and only leave the "click frequencies" there. It's a bit easier to mix imo.
Some useful tips for metal mixing, courtesy of the Recording Revolution:
- Bass and Kick EQ:
.- Bass and Kick SideChain:
.- Kick click (Klick!):
.I love the idea for this thread and I hope some of the more experienced metal mixers drop some tips