I'm SUPER glad you're not suffering from video game addiction, but please don't assume it isn't a real problem just because you don't have it. Keep in mind people used to doubt addiction to hard drugs and alcohol in the same way, attributing their addictions to "bad choices" rather than the actual neurophysiological changes that had taken place. Pretty much anything that produces a dopamine response can be addictive and lead to problems with impulse control as well as being extremely disruptive to motivation and memory circuitry. An inability to abstain is the feature of addiction, and video games are designed to keep people playing. This applies so much more strongly to modern games considering developers have had decades to refine their methods, and in a lot of cases modern games are downright predatory in this way (games that combine gambling with gameplay in particular). Not everyone who plays games will be addicted to gaming just like not everyone who drinks will become an alcoholic, but it IS an extremely fast-growing issue.
Before I prepare to send in my "resubmit", I would like to seek some guidance from the folks here on the forums. I'll include a link to the judge's comments below this paragraph. The focus of the critique was the production side of things, as I had numerous issues with balance (EQ, volume, panning) that needed addressing. I'm happy to hear any ideas you all have about the composition itself and the instrument choices, but my main motivation for coming here is help with the production work - mixing, mastering, etc.
Since reading their feedback, I've been hard at work reproducing my track to fix the issues they mentioned and a few of my own. I want to know what you guys think and if you have any other suggestions for improvement.
Thanks for listening!
1. Here's a link to the current version of the track:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/xb4td7ecvn93r6c/Rainbow Resort ReMix 2_22_2018.wav?dl=0
2. Here's the version of the track that the judges critiqued:
FINAL UPDATE: https://drive.google.com/open?id=1XOs1iFAoqR0DeZNrcUoSSCw034gCFDta
So, did some more mastering and sent it off to the judges. Hopefully they like it. The above link is the one I sent them, so you can hear the same thing they'll be judging.
Thanks @Gario and @Liontamer for the responses. Based on what you're saying, I think I'm in the clear on the sampling front. I sampled the voice clip, and a small bit of the intro to the song (a backing pad sound that plays throughout my remix but is very subtle). The vast majority of my remix is not sampled from the ost. Would love to hear your opinions on the remix itself. I've also always been paranoid that my mixing won't be good enough if I submit.