Hmm I listened to this yesterday
Drums sound mechanical... use velocities to make them sound more humanized, particularly on the ride at the intro and the snare
Also, the mixing is kinda muddy at the moment, the rhythm guitar sounds like noise over the lead guitar which sounds ok I guess, maybe to prominent... use EQ to try and fix it up.
also, the crash cymbals on the drums are too loud...
Other than that its ok at the moment I think, but you'd be better off getting critique from someone that does guitar stuff, like neko or fishy.