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Evaluation: Maybe went a little too far with the extreme vaporwave-bass like you said. I'm clearly hearing both sources being used. The bassline from super metroid and the repetitive vamp from sonic 2, both slowed down quite a bit. It's really cool how you've managed to make them work together. Consider having some variations in your second repeat of the themes in the second half 2:09 and on. With that said, the bass is absolutely huge and takes up a large part of the sonic space. Please tame it and get it to sit in conjunction with the rest of the parts so they work together. It could also use some clarity, some of the lower notes it plays get muddy. Not sure if it's the samples or synth itself but i'm hearing a buzziness on the left side, and it honestly made me think something was wrong with my monitors XD. If that's something you intended, try to make it sound more intentional and less subtle. I do like the pads used in the background, they are very pleasant and sound very vaporwave as intended. The arrangement itself is the strongest part of what's going on here. Work on the production as noted and clean it up/refine it. Cool track, definitely has some potential with some work!

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Evaluation: Highly enjoyable piece you've come up with. I like the dichotomy of the two halves. Arrangement is solid and the source is clear throughout. When the piano-type sound is isolated at the end 4:11-end it feels stilted and could use a touch of humanization. (Might benefit from having it throughout as well.) Good transition 2:17 into the next section. The initial drum hits combined with the return of the bass part at 2:23 may be the cause of the clipping you mentioned in the previous post. Rather then have the master compressor, take a look here and see if there is any way that it could be cleaned up. I'd say clean up that middle section's part 2:17-3:15 for being busy and muddled. Also check on humanization throughout. After that I think you're set. Nice track

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Evaluation: Arrangement, fantastic. Loving it. Arrangement is absolutely ready to go. Love the quieter sections as a contrast to the pumping of the rest of the track. 2:18 I'm noticing a sudden volume reduction doesn't feel as consistent as the other "pumping", don't know if it's compression or something else. I didn't notice it earlier at 0:20, with the same part; but it may be because less parts are playing here. Look into that little dip there and then I would say this is ready to go. Nice work!

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This is great, so much going on in a short time and very well executed. Great arrangement and excellent production. I feel like there are a couple of references to the Beatles here: 0:00-0:16 is the intro for Because in the arpeggio 2:53-2:57 mellotron is the intro to Strawberry Fields Forever Really cool to bring that influence into the track. Cheers!

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OMG, I literally had made it to today without getting Whammed. This is the farthest I've survived in the game. So mad and laughing so hard at the same time.

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Evaluation: Wow, lots of cool texture going on. Honestly thought the track was going to keep the empty eerie vibe of the intro the whole way through. 0:54 when the guitar from the source comes in, it quickly gets overwhelmed with other parts around it, very busy. 1:30 feels better when it's guitar/cello together, less chaotic. 2:25 Drums don't feel like they belong. It feels like they are playing a different time signature than the rest of the parts. 3:33 Marimba sounds like the Unsolved Mysteries theme song I don't understand the ending. Is it supposed to be Vincent waking up? Strange and sudden, this doesn't work to me. While I like the textures and atmosphere created, the balance between the parts is off and needs to be blended together. The parts my ear wants to focus on melodically seem to be overshadowed by other parts. The first minute of the track sounds really good to me (more of that please). Definitely some cool ideas, and I would love to see my points addressed.

Welcome, and congratulations on the first post I really like this arrangement, it's very strong and a solid interpretation. Hand percussion throughout the piece is fantastic. 2:54 I was not expecting Song of Storms suddenly, but it works. Production is mostly clean (only did a quick headphone listen). Where you may run into problems is realism with the violin. Attack on some of the notes sound a bit behind. Aside from the violin, this is a strong creative arrangement. Plenty of the original is there with both subtle changes as well as your own take. Should you choose to submit, I suspect this would have a solid chance to pass.

Ask yourself this: "Does it need to have a cadence?" It's not a requirement for a loop to have a cadence. Don't be concerned with including something unless you want to or need to (such as a requirement from a director). Your transition at 0:40 works for me. The thing that I thought was strange was a fade-in at the beginning, doesn't work for me on a boss tune. (Unless that's just that way for WIP purposes).

Cool, thanks for sharing. I still feel the same. There were definite improvements made from the first version, but you can go even further!

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Evaluation: This is a fantastic arrangement, your additions and variations on the original theme are lovely. Also the soundscape is fantastic. I went back and found the judges decision so I could get an idea of what was going on. As I have no context and have not heard that version I will do my best to give feedback on a standalone basis. The drums are mechanical at times as was noted by the judges previously, but not a deal breaker. I personally did not really see lacking low end except for the kick drum. Could use a boost in the low end with EQ or use a different kick sample. I would recommend a general boost on the kick and bass somewhere around the 55-85Hz range to beef this up and fill the spectrum up. How much to boost and how much Q and what frequency i'll leave up to you. It does not take away from the ambient nature of the track to do this, it adds a fullness that strengthens the parts that are above it. After all, a house cannot stand without a strong foundation! When the guitar returns at 3:09 felt loud and sudden. This is REALLY CLOSE and those are two minor nitpicks that should be able to be fixed easily, once you do that I think you're ready to resub. For now i'm going to return it to wip on those two easy fixes (guitar return and bass boost)

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Congratulations on your first remix and welcome to the forums. Evaluation: I want to start out with the arrangement, the original is about 0:17 seconds long before the loop. You've managed to develop it a little bit using orchestration, which is what the original does passing the melody from different parts. That's a good way to write for an orchestra. From 0:08-0:16 the adding of each part brings a nice crescendo to a fuller moment when everything plays together. 1:02-1:10 is a nice interpretation and new material to bring us back around the melody. 1:23-1:33 and 1:46-1:50 more good interpretation and act as good bridges to get to the next part. 1:54-2:00 I like how you trade the melody back and forth between the trumpets and trombone sections. Having the strings play occasional pizzicato arpeggios is a nice addition that helps fill out the top end some. The snare part writing is very good and very fitting of the style you're going for here. The production is where some issues arise. 1:18-1:24 and 2:08-end the lead trumpet has a strange phasing/chorusing effect on it and feels out of place for an orchestral track. Much of the supporting parts feel buried underneath the much louder leads and need to be balanced up when compared to the lead trumpets. I know getting realistic samples of real instruments can be difficult, but there are things you can do to help even though they may not be the highest quality samples. Adding some humanization to where the notes land on the beat as well as varying up the velocities/loudness of the notes will help with that. This is a great first remix with a lot of potential for even more. It's not quite ready for submission as is. The arrangement is solid and I found it to be the strongest part of the piece. Work on the humanization and the realism of the samples and you could be on your way.

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Evaluation: Well well well, this is a rad track. I did go back and find the judge's decision to see more about what they were saying despite not have hearing the previous version. Here is my breakdown on source usage: 0:01-0:46 source 0:47-0:54 source 0:55-1:25 multiple sources 1:26-2:33 multiple sources with variation and additions on each repeat 2:38-2:41 source interpretation **2:42-3:19 original material inspired by sources** 3:20-4:03 interpreted source 4:04-4:11 original build 4:12-4:26 source 4:27-4:36 source 276 seconds total 183 seconds of source without interpretation 229 seconds with interpretation This should be enough usage to get you over that hump that was mentioned previously. I do notice that things return or loop a few times, but you do vary up each return so that it's not the exact same thing playing again (which is good). I.e. Adding a different instrument, rhythm, or melodic variation. You manage to keep the arrangement fresh and it changes right when it needs to, especially with a 10 second source to utilize. Production is solid throughout. My only nitpick is 2:27-2:33 gets a bit too busy to really be clear with all of the parts going on at the same time. Considering it was just a quick spot of that it's not a deal breaker for me, just would like to point it out as it could lead to issues if there was more. Overall, very nice track. I dug this quite a bit, and would love to see this passing. Good luck on your resub!

Can you please link the original source? I've been searching for it and keep finding covers or versions from the other games. I hear that it's Stones from the series but if you can please link me to the original source I can give you more accurate feedback.

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Evaluation: For starters, let me just start out by saying welcome to the community. You have very solid production values here, samples executed cleanly and mixed down well. 0:12 was that Megaman X buster charging sound effect?? I like how your beat and the bassline work together to be a cohesive unit. 1:15 is exactly where you should be going with this, excellent mini-solo and interpretation on the theme. So what's the problem? The length of the track. There's a lot to work with in the original that can be developed or expanded upon. While we do get some cool solo at 1:11-1:33, I don't feel that it's enough for a piece that's only 1:56 and is very stylistically similar to the original. You even use the orchestral hits just like in the original. In the submission standards it says section 1. Format: What could work is if you really expand out some more interpretation on the themes and ideas from the original to help extend the length more and show even more of your own take on it. It's a solid start thus far, and I look forward to seeing what you can do with it. Work on those things and check back in.

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