The sound of this remix is awesome. I love the glitch you've got going on here.
The mixing is a little on the strange side, sometimes - it's crystal clear for some things (like the tick sounds in the drums) while it seems a little muddier in other areas (some of the square wankery toward the end, for example). Clarity with every sound will help with this genre, and you show that you can do it. (I know some of the less clear sounds are intentional, by the way, like the high & low cut instrument in the beginning, which was awesome).
I hear the connection of the song in this, but the direction it seems to be going right now seems to be a little too liberal. A single texture and wankery over it won't cut it if you're shooting for OCR. The use of the source in the beginning was great - throughout the track you'll need more stuff like that if you want a shot.
I agree with Rockos about the bass drum - it needs some more power behind it. Compression & sidechaining the bass will be your friend, I suspect. The primary drum pattern gets pretty boring pretty quickly. There are some really cool details that you have going on throughout the drum track, but the bass/hat/snare/hat undercurrent is lame. Don't be afraid to break that pattern up.
I really like the approach you've got for this. Transposing the melodies like you have is very effective when you use it, and the glitching is great. You just need some more melody and themes incorporated - I hear what you have going, but I don't think it'll be enough, yet.
Can't wait to see what you do with the next section of the song.