This isn't bad, but what happened to the bassline? A pumping track like this needs something in the low-range to support what's happening up top. The whole thing ends up sounding thin. Needs a strong bassline.
The track goes a bit long, I feel, which is such a weird thing to say about a trance piece. The energy levels on this feel so static; you've got one short little bit where the percussion drops out, but that lasts all of 30 seconds and then we're just back into it. I don't feel like there's enough push and pull in this arrangement. It just relentlessly plods forward.
A good start, but needs work, IMO. Definitely needs a bassline, some more highs and lows in the arrangement, etc.
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