That video was helpful! In addition to observing Zircon's process a little, watching it made me realize that I was trying to make a dance track for some reason, when instead I wanted it to be like something from a John Carpenter movie, evoking some concept of waking the dead, or perhaps of the dead waking the living? Something like that. It's a vague concept, but it's starting to get closer to something I'm proud of, though I'm probably going to step away from it for a few days to listen to it with fresh ears.
Those accidentals in the pizzicato part were hiding from me because that instrument has kind of a loose tuning. As soon as I switched it to a synth the problem was extremely clear, and now I have all these nice synths!