Don't know if you're still here, but some thoughts.
The intro is startlingly close to the original, both in synth design and pacing.
I'm about 1:00 into it, your piece has done almost nothing besides upgrade the sound quality of the original. Arrangement is repetitive
Your high freqs stick out and echo a bit too much and really cloud out your lower end. Drums are a bit lackluster.
Summary:
1st You need to work more on your arrangement, first and foremost.
2nd Synth design is pretty generic, try building a more cohesive texture for the piece
3rd Work on drum sequencing to give more energy all around.
Before you even think about submitting this, work on these 3.